its truly outstanding
how mentally and psysically
you build me
the feeling you give me is lovely
truly when im with u i never feel lonely
a beautiful angel heaven sent me
even though theres two of us u make me feel free
feel free to spent time being sweet
time kissing your cheeks
i know you understanding me
taking all emotional gifts u handing me

I love everything from your frame
love your name
god how i love you u made me change
the feeling at first was strange
i felt i couldnt go the range
that anger would always restrain
but i see now that ure love always explains
the feeling i feel and all the pain
all turned into nuthin by just saying ure name

being with you gots me hopefull
that i always stay truthfull
and that u never use me as a tool
and that we stay respectfull
always together our love will rule...

since the day our love was born
so greatly has it grown
always pacing and never does it slow
still everyday our love we show
me catching every kiss you throw
hopefully i can kiss you more

u shine like a beatiful daimond
now i cant stop rhyming
of your angelicness and great timing
glad u walked into my life and now ure defining
the main point of my life and now its shinning


this was done in about 10 mins, my girl asked me to keystyle a poem for her. i just wrote one part, then the next, and kept goin. tell me watchu think of it for wat it is, a keystyled poem.

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Good piece here.. You got through what your title gave the hint of and it was an enjoyable read.. nice vocabulary and the flow was good.. Keep at it and return the favor.. Peace

Holla

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Sonz Of Enlightenment

Dang this was nice. I liked.....well everything it was perfect to me! but its mushy ewwww! lol! J/k. You expressed your feelings and alowed the reader to feel them to keep doin ya thing

it was a good write. plus all the other stuff they said, emotion was good and was clear and strong. topic was a used, but still made it interesting. only thing i found was thr rhyming seemed too forced at times.

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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