young mike - down to ride
word perfect - writer's block.......
bugz bunny - burnin cd's

Yo....just somethin I'm keyin up......some serious shit i guess.....
prally some i'm recordin....album potential....so be honest

BEAT: Jay - Z - Moment Of Clarity
*hook*
We all try to look beyond what the truth is
but a lot of people in this world are ruthless
Out for that dollar they rootin' through cribs
It's when you look hard, you find a blue chip
A friend, sum1 who won't actually use kids
Some one who knows the danger of abuse is
A hard thing to take, for hearts health and sake
Smart people make, art and wealth they brave

verse 1

Theres a lotta things that people just brush off
Like kids in school bathrooms who huffin dust off
Damn, the world we live in pain equals affection
We need some kinda help, some kinda protection
If I had a choice I'd never have smoked that Newport
Marijuana would never be choked my life's support
An addictions a disease, I ask you when will we see?
Blinded from the best things in life and they are free
Freindly, but I gotta be truthfull all in tha same
Gentley rock the booth cool trade it all in fa fame
I'm not even sold in stores, too hot for TV
So Hot I scold thru doors, you Got Ta See Me

*hook*

We all try to look beyond what the truth is
but a lot of people in this world are ruthless
Out for that dollar they rootin' through cribs
It's when you look hard, you find a blue chip
A friend, sum1 who won't actually use kids
Some one who knows the danger of abuse is
A hard thing to take, for hearts health and sake
Smart people make, art and wealth they brave

verse 2

I dont take orders all to well, you can say he's a rebel
I know you like the beat's bass but you raisin' the treble
I gotta model chic I like her hair curly same time straight
If I could have both at once I'd say da world we in is great
But that's not the case 25 ta life's my fate twice the rate
It's not a dutch, but it's a big fat ugly judge that i face
Like everyone else on this planet I've been placed
Reality's a problem and the way I've Ran is a disgrace
But put the pen in my hand and no man can erase
Lyrics is like life I put'em ta use all in good taste
If you could relate, then I guess you'd get what I'm sayin
We could debate, but then I guess I'd be playin
Some cats take E but that shit horrible for sure
End up wit Parkinson's NO Massage could cure
Its our lives at war, wit the tricks life's got in store
life that is......

*hook*
We all try to look beyond what the truth is
but a lot of people in this world are ruthless
Out for that dollar they rootin' through cribs
It's when you look hard, you find a blue chip
A friend, sum1 who won't actually use kids
Some one who knows the danger of abuse is
A hard thing to take, for hearts health and sake
Smart people make, art and wealth they brave

verse 3

Leadin life on tha streets,
Freedom on tha mic wit speech
Graffiti's what I write for weeks,
Eyes beedy cause I like the leak
Spoke in heaven's ways it's a sign
Broke in seven days at a time
Smokin' Lemon haze for dis rhyme
I hear God callin' on one of his sons
I'm fallin' off a ton of my funds
That means shit ta me compared to exsistence
Rap gleams simply ta scare my persistence
But I live This,
ya muscle bound words cant lift this
I hussle round herbs cause I'm gifted
Place me on the Concrete it's Chuck witta Bundle
Neva take me off my feet man fuck wit my hunger
Raise me like a convict stuck in the struggle
Cops always tryt'a take the hustler's money he doubles
Destroy a life's work from empire ta rubble
They cut off his legs and left'em wit stubble

*hook*

We all try to look beyond what the truth is
but a lot of people in this world are ruthless
Out for that dollar they rootin' through cribs
It's when you look hard, you find a blue chip
A friend, sum1 who won't actually use kids
Some one who knows the danger of abuse is
A hard thing to take, for hearts health and sake
Smart people make, art and wealth they brave

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this was tight man it had good flow...liked it............

Not bad I didn't mind it at all. It was actually quite good. It was a long read but that's ok it was worth it. I think you should put it in audio you know what I mean? So people can see how you actually perform your piece? Because alot of people can write shit but when they perform it, it sounds alot better. And as in Maven's title- Vice Versa. Overall good job.

Peace!

thanx uppn........its gonna be audio...........

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Yeah this was alright i thought....it was long but it was a good read....your structure was good in this.....the flow in this was good, it stayed on through out the piece, never really got off at all....you had some good multies....the chorus was good, i liked that....and i do think it would sound good as a audio....good job....keep at it.

this peice was great.

good multis, flow was consistent, great struct..all lines the same length

this would sound great as audio..keep it up

Good flow, Keep doin ya thang

upppn........

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pretty nice....now all u need to do is put this on the real beat though.....nice lyrics
i felt some emotion and imagery in this one
lyrics were very good
if u gonna record it let me kno tho
nice drop by the way

9.2/10

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this verse was the best. everything was great and it went together really nicely. i thought it was very creative. 9/10

holla back uppn this joint!

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nice, prolly ya best yet, good flow, yea you should lay it to a beat of your own, either way this was a nice rhyme....keep it up
cause you have some nice stuff

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