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01-02-04, 08:30 AM
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Brain Stress
IP: 1E3A 659B
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MC Illest Kat Frost Technician Reppin My mind is overflowed, trapped in an elevated level~of~stress Hell constrantly quizzes my mind, Sins are a devilish~test My pride grows weary, but I continue on a sullivant~quest Fate detereorates my heart, I inherited a delicate~chest Now, I lay rampant ferocity over towering my competition With flagrant velocity, Kill foes wit no remorseful decisions Constant injections of weed recently distored da vision All my knowledge locked dowm...Entire resources imprisioned
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01-02-04, 08:56 AM
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yeah, well vocab overload of complexity which worked..flow was good..all i can advise you on is to use metas and more multis to improve this..it was short yet sweet...
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01-02-04, 11:48 AM
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IP: 1E3A 659B
Upping for mo feedback...
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01-02-04, 12:31 PM
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Pretty small little verse but not bad.. flow was cool maybe neeed some more wittyness.. better pjunchs n shti but still not bad man.. keep workin at it
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01-02-04, 12:33 PM
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Thank God For Dictionaries Or You Would Be Stumped
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01-02-04, 01:05 PM
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IP: 1E3A 659B
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 TY for all the feedback guys... Does anyone have any last minute feedback before I drop my next drop rhyme.....
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01-02-04, 01:22 PM
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IP: 1B3B C284
this was pretty good, some nice lines and some creative thinking a nice way to explain stress, or what not. Some good vocabulary. Nice job.
Peep myn in my sig, thanks
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