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Old 01-05-04, 11:13 PM   #1
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Opposites Attract, Magnets seem to always be reacting
Seeming happy, there'd be none if the sad wasn't attracting
A Difficult life, lead for a simple Man, he isn't into technology
Complicated circuits, making simple for man,what acknowledging

My eyes hooked upon Your body, seems like you wasn't for me
Strangely, I did really seem to find that to be kind of Sexy..
So come on, You know that our destiny is Truly affecting...
Fuck it,Make your South, and My North pole Start Connecting
I found it surprising, She only slept with just 3 dudes
Two not even naked, and only one in the Nude..
You know it, and Tito Nieves knows you like it Like that
Fuck Rap, with an ass like that, who needs that shit Back?
With More Money and fast cars, You seem to get the Bitches
I got all the Money in the world, drowned in my own Riches

I don't really get it at all, How I can say I hate rap
Stereotypical Prototypes, Yet I seem to keep coming Back
I'm poor, yet verses like these come at regular enjoyment
I'm sure then, when I really Give up, that the Magnet has broken

Blah...
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Old 01-05-04, 11:33 PM   #2
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kinda nice piece..nothin special at all, an average attempt at a slightly above average topic...i won't lie ..it's not great..but it's not bad...coulda put more thought into it once you had your concept..it seems liek you jus spent a few minutes on it...keep writin skiddz

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Old 01-05-04, 11:40 PM   #3
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Links else i must close this..:P:P:P Ill reply later..im off now..to get some pussssssssssssssy werd life
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Old 01-06-04, 06:32 PM   #4
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Word...And I did not put any effort in this...Maybe later I'll get something for ya'll to love me for.
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Old 01-06-04, 06:51 PM   #5
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flow was kind of simple in places, yet stylistically and in temrs of originality it was a good piece. a nice little insight into real (was this real life?) life. i liked the concept of magnets as attraction between people.

good for a short one. keep on posting.
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Old 01-06-04, 07:55 PM   #6
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...Could've Done Better...
...Make The Chorus Shorter...
...Ya Verse Lacked Complexity And Flow...
...Sloppy Wording Was Evident With...
"I found it surprising, She only slept with just 3 dudes
Two not even naked, and only one in the Nude.."
...You Lacked Wordplay And Metaphors As Well...
...Stay Elevatin'...
...1...
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Old 01-06-04, 07:58 PM   #7
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Elevatin??
I know this wasn't my best piece, but I wasn't trying to make it..The middle verse was there for a purpose..
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Old 01-06-04, 08:12 PM   #8
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Quote:
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Elevatin??
I know this wasn't my best piece, but I wasn't trying to make it..The middle verse was there for a purpose..

The purpose was a dedication to me...notice the name...but i dont know why people are droppin' feedback liek it was horrible...it was good for a keystyle...which i know it was...simple..yet on point with a ok vocab and good flow...we've gotta stp these noobs from being allowed in open mic...should have liek a elite open mic....but good drop skiddz...
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Old 01-06-04, 08:50 PM   #9
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whupass shiz
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