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Deaths Riegn
IP: EC0B 84C7
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skiddz mentill johnny-6-feet death is restless, despite relentless repentance// he yearns for earth to burn with sulphuric stenchs// he senses, that our world is falling to chaotic ruin// his hand clenchs the evil and hate that we've been brewin// deaths in wars attracts scores of deamons from hells deepest cores// dragging more infidels to the floor of brimstone shores// moralities backbone is tore, opens the door to apocalyptic battle// society dismantles, and frigid winds blow the fire from its candle*// he tirelessly watchs,and campaigns against rightousness// and destroys those who reign and those who fight for this// takes lives and conquers with, a hand becoming of pervasive evil// one that abolishs the last stand and persuades the feeble// to join an army of disciples, common trifles turn into war for titles// **a recitle of misguided rifles firing upon an innocent child**// a long line of single filed men march into thier fates// unable to defend against the destiny that awaits// lives negate, eventually ceasing all living existence// he non-intentionally broke the never-ending repitition// and now i wait, for another life in this world to be passed// or for my own meak reality to be stripped from my grasp// i ask myself; how long must it last, before ive finished my task?// |
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IP: EC0B 84C7
bahh, it got all fucked up when i pasted it, oh well...
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IP: 86F6 017D
Wait. I don't get it. did you copy that from somewehre?
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IP: EC0B 84C7
no i didn't copy it off someone, i write all my rhymes in wordpad then cut and paste them onto here if i think they are worth while...
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IP: EC0B 84C7
quit sleeping on this!
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
thought this had a nice level of complexity... wasnt very original tho... but well worded...most flowed good... lost the rhyme once i think...which let it down a bit...but yeah i liked it...good drop...pZ...
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Word.
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IP: DD10 0DFF
Yeah i thought this was nice piece here.....your structure in this was alright...just watch some lines length though....it flowed pretty well i thought, it kinda got off at some points through out the piece but still was good....but overall this was good piece...keep at it.
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IP: EC0B 84C7
thank yall for the feedback, uppin for the last time...
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IP: D4CC BCDF
nicely done, reppin for tha dynasty, wasnt off the wall but nice work, better than at least 80% of the rappers on here
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IP: 927C 4CFE
i thought it was really good, you are really creative........had really good wordplay and i think it was put together nicely.........pz
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