This is dedicated to you wack-heads...and freeposters


I’m sick of these biters who can’t beat the path
They’re jokes for writers who can’t treat my laugh
It’s basic, let’s face it, Rap Battles talent is all wasted
We’re hated if we make it, and turn down challenges that we’re faced with
I’ve seen so many cases, of free posters with aching necks
Fake emcees devoted to elevation, and never take a step
…-----------------It’s time for a change----------------------…
so step to my block, where there is no room for elementary
act childish, I’ll let my pen drop, and chop your head off like a guillotine
you feeling me?…now witness as the sites garbage scatters in seven
you kids got 87 wins, and couldn’t reach my level with a latter to heaven
Fuck these heads are useless…it’s getting my stomach tied in knots
Keep fucking around and act stupid…you’ll end up on Wr!te’rs Block



Let's see some good...honest...feedback, otherwise the open mic is gay

liked this...this was dope...exactly what I am about to post...8/10..

good job.

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Battles
Pink Slips 007 Pt. 2

...Decent...
...Vocab Was Not Overwhelming, But A Few Mind Testing Words Would Not Hurt...
...As For Flow, I Can't Say. Because You May Have Wrote This To A Beat, And It Probably Is Different Than The One In My Head...
...I Saw One Real Metaphor But It Was Somewhat Played, The Guillotine Line...
...Ya Wordplay Was Nice, Likin' That Joker Line...
...Wording Could Be Better On The Heaven/Seven Bar...
...Other Than That, Good Shit...
...Keep Elevatin'...
...1...

but stop startin with flow, wasnt as smooth as could be. some nice vocab tho, bit childish but still quite good.

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&postid=1054469#post1054469

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&postid=1054480#post1054480

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&postid=1054490#post1054490

..Decent piece..good and much needed topic..good flow,decent vocab..etc...decent piece..

this was a decent piece, flow was sorta choppy but had some nice
meta's, some nice wordplay in there and your multi's are comin
along. I like the line about scatters in seven and ladders to
heaven line the best.
keep at it.

your wordplay needs to be worked on and yo flow wasn't that good, an try to rhyme-or it sounds wack, but apart from that it was a nice piece 6.5/10

bit of a played topic,,, but handled well... put together nicely....but the vocab could be better along with the flow, it fell in places..and a bit short....other than that...liked it....pZ..

rue....Nice piece,,,,pretty honest
vocab was decent....
wordplay was decent
flow was good
multis....need work

overall nice piece

I’ve seen so many cases, of free posters with aching necks
Fake emcees devoted to elevation, and never take a step
^^^^^^^^^best part i'd say it was decent, no vocab but that aint a bad thing cuz u can't overflow shit wit vocab all tha time.

flow was the most outstanding piece
the content wasnt really all that in depth and brushed the surface of the topic i feel
but it was easy to read and flowed well so it wasnt all bad at all
try and improve your imagery and writers voice so to speak