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Old 01-08-04, 02:17 PM   #1
Gunman tha Great
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I'm here now you herbs can go play/
And i'm strapped wit calanders Wrapped wit phone chords:ya'll can 'call it a day'/
If i can't win on my own terms then i'd rather forfeit or lose/
This shit is a black and white photo and i'm showing up wit a red tee on 4 u dudes/
After i spit its like i'm putting law covers together its case closed/
And i'm betting on myself to win everytime like i'm the Rap game's Pete Rose/
Ya'll enjoy playing games but i'm taking tha board so u fools have no Clue/
My mindset is "stop talking and do something" like i live by the Iverson interview/
I'm dope all year round ya'll clowns are like girls:u only flow heavy one time a month/
And u 'gangstas' talk that 'i'll kill anybody' shit well try yourself for once/
Its like i got violent ashtma tha way i refuse to play games/
besides i'm to busy handing out watches wit quarters to show u herbs that tha 'times have changed'/
This rap game is all ass now and my lyrics are a giant Belt/
Cuz talking shit to me is like committing suicide:U aint hurting nobody but yourself/
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Old 01-08-04, 02:27 PM   #2
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Old 01-08-04, 03:40 PM   #3
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U had some depth in this verse. However, the flow and structure seemed to be off.... U had a nice choice of words, but since the flow wasnt corresponding with the words, it threw the verse off somewhat... I still think ya did a good job on this, but work on the structure.....

if ya get a chance could ya drop an honest vote here:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...ntonio+banderas
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Old 01-08-04, 03:54 PM   #4
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i agree the flow was choppy, fell in places... specially with the syllable count.... jus remove a few in places... other than that some nice lines n choice of wording, but maybe too basic in places... but not bad.....pZ
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Old 01-09-04, 09:26 AM   #5
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i just commented on some herb's post fuck a link......This is what happens when u listen to joe budden all day
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Old 01-09-04, 09:34 AM   #6
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this was good, try keep lines at a simular length homie, yeah i was feeling this u had a nice flow.

just elevate till you great, 8/10

vote at my battle yahhl,

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Old 01-09-04, 09:48 AM   #7
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nyce base..it jus seems u got too many wordds in each line...u need to cut them down...but it was tight/right/i flip a verse all nyte/right/wen u see me cummin..i dont bite/ i fight/me and 80/actin shady fuck u motherfuckers/
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