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Old 01-10-04, 12:00 PM   #1
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You Are!

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Ya Citizens of ya self, and not society so be content
Try’na change ya way of living, jus wasn’t fucking meant
To reinvent is one thing but it rings without a tone
To implement in theory but in reality, it doesn’t hit home
I don’t condone re-creation its manipulation gone wrong
Cos you are who you are, and your from where your from
If people don’t like it, ‘fuck em’ we’re individuals, every one
Nuthin wrong with ‘difference’ its keeps our gene pool strong
With different personalities, doesn’t mean you’ve been conned
Why respond by conforming, cos that’s the one thing ive learned
It’s like a reflection in the mirror, yes, it’s always returned
It’s one of the few things in life that’ll blister if it’s burnt
Can reshape but it’ll hurt, would reject n wouldn’t even flirt
Can’t revert to what your not, should settle for what you are
Be apart from the crowd stand proud, no doubt you’ll go far
Cos like I said….. YOU ARE WHAT YOU ARE!
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Old 01-10-04, 12:43 PM   #2
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nice...as usual..Uppin on this...
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Old 01-10-04, 02:55 PM   #3
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upp..... gotta read,,, one of the best ive done in a while.... going onto audio too.... as the first verse of a track....
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Old 01-10-04, 02:59 PM   #4
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nice flow,,,,, better structure than normal,,, the odd nice multi, good vocab and you came at the subject well...... your stuff always sounds grimey and philosophical like the wu tangs earlier stuff, keep it up.......
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Old 01-10-04, 03:20 PM   #5
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another ill drop..
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Old 01-10-04, 03:21 PM   #6
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good vocab...
multis on point with low...
kept togehter well...
thought out...
wish it had been longer...
congrats...

plz check this o.m out
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=105602
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Old 01-10-04, 04:30 PM   #7
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uppin this shit...pZ
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Old 01-10-04, 04:55 PM   #8
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yo man tight shit, good content was feelin this piece, can't see any flaws everything was down, flow, structure, vocab, multi's and your rhyme scheme was hot keep droppin. peace.
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Old 01-11-04, 10:20 AM   #9
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thnx man.......
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Old 01-12-04, 06:11 AM   #10
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upp this shit.........pZ
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Old 01-12-04, 12:04 PM   #11
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Good vocab here.
Flow was pretty good.
Not much wordplay, but the message came across pretty well.
Emotion was blah, but I didn't get that this was suppossed to bring anyone to tears, so it's cool.
All in all, 6.5/10

Nothing dramatic, nothing bad either.

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