Torn apart by a name, that by chance is the same/
As the enemy i possess, still can't extinguish the flame/
That burns in the night, firing passions alight, as the torch/
Burns before us, causing sparks to ignite, they act due to spite/
Thay can't have what we do so they tear us apart at the heart and persue/
All the dreams that were jaded, fashioned away now are faded/
Jealousy reigns over the rumours untrue/
Care to fly, see beyond the surface of minds/
That covers the earth and the soul of mankind/
Hate and woe still combined, their selfish fingers entwined/
Seep control and reek havoc over families, blind/
Blind to the hatred, blind to injustice, and crime/
Have forgotten the meaning, what it is to be kind/
Prisons packed with the weak ones, who could'nt see past/
All the mockery made as they bust a hole in their ass/

i liked this peace, a nice way in which you used your words,
the multies were pretty nice,

keep droppin an you'll grow from strength to strength!!

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thank you for the support!

nice drop, ide add more onto it to make something out of it, nice multis tho, we need to do a collab sometime for CV

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yeah..feelin that collab idea? so, Topic...? you have a topic? pm me!

ugg wont be able to do anything untill about a week, im at my dads, hit my open mic up tho if u couled and ill think of a topic sooner or later

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I was feelin this at the begining, multis were there apprently keep it up.

yeah i agree this was a good piece here.....your structure in this was alright....you had good flow in this, it stayed on point through out the piece, never really got off....you had some good vocab in there....but overall this was a good piece, liked the read....keep at it.

this was ok... vocab needs to be stepped up
multis were simple.. but pretty coo drop

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My people skills are way better then yours, nigga..