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01-13-04, 08:48 AM
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Above Us
IP: 6621 F0EC
Another death leaves a family weeping,
But know that hes happy forever sleeping, Whenever thinking bout us look above, Where we be happy with the endless love, I only learned to be the heartless thug, Beauty defined when I die from an 'artists' slug, But now filled wit emotion Im feeling fraud, But all I got to do is pray and talk to our god, |
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01-13-04, 11:19 AM
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IP: F718 7AAD
This was good. I liked it. Flow and scheme were both good. You let emotions out. Even thou it was short, it was still nice. Short and to the point. Overall I liked it. Keep it up.
Another death leaves a family weeping, But know that hes happy forever sleeping, Whenever thinking bout us look above, ^^fav lines. |
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