Visions perplexed, one close call and my decisions a next,
Youll be in the dumpster while rats piss on ya neck,
As my precision collects, Tell you what my wisdom affects,
Written in text, y'all think that it be missin respect,
But its dissin ya, to getta betta ear you gotta listen ta vets,
Think you a playa but can only go to prison fa sex,
Ive risen ta depths higher then any mufucka here will ever be,
Ya best be thinkin respect this dog or fear'll sever me,
You just keep on thinkin that homie cause your exactly right,
Battling ya'll kinda like watchin a fuckin packi fight,
Arms swingin like a rag doll, lookin up to em cause this fags tall,
But It'll be the other way around when ya legs fall,
Ill give it 20 seconds before I think I can deminish this kid,
Cause it aint hard wit these guys too finish it quick,
Just never mind, Textbook crew just couldnt comprehend,
Think first, cause u bitches just wouldnt want me dead,
Tryna ta constantly swing at me has got ya fucking arm hurt,
This hick rappin is like an RB member doing farm work,
Thinkin we can be dissed you try it but quickly take it back,
Cause then I'll have you 'lickin sweat off my naked sac',

Cause all yall mothafuckas be bitches, Ive just started shit, Lets see if yall come up wit anything,

pretty good, i liked tha flow

^ you need to leave better feedback.

This was pretty good i thought....structure in this was good through the whole piece....you had some good flow in this, it stayed on point through out the piece i thought, flowed pretty well....you also had some nice multies in this piece, liked that...i can tell you are elevating...keep it up man.

^well u need to change ur "feedback" u say the same shit every time...
Or u just say "fix ur structure" then say the other bullshit...

The flow was ok'
This was a pretty decent diss..
The structure was pretty nice..
Seemed like u forced a few lines, but who doesnt =p
...This was a decent read, keep elevating

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My people skills are way better then yours, nigga..

Thanks guys. Appreciate the feedback. Good too notice people noticin Im elevatin, cause I noticed.
Pz.

That's some good shit yo. Vocab was good, structure was pretty good too. Keep that shit up Yo. And you have elevated a shitload since we battled.

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