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Old 01-15-04, 07:37 PM   #1
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I am Inspired(continued)

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I am inspired:

To write the scriptures of life with divine influence
To communicate feelings with the tongue of a prince
Flow and shout to get the interest of my soul aroused
Deity cascades from my mind to my mouth endowed
with beautiful, wonderful words that inspiration defines
I describe poems and rhymes that touch peoples lives
I generate tales that sometimes are not "compos mentis"
Tales I create like an orgasm that leaves you breathless
Reform to make the action from my life fit inspiration
Perform finer art and flow better than lung's respiration
Rhymes that I create are newly born and are so distinct
They'll apprehend that nirvana could be acheived in print
My scriptures are rightous although greatly philosophical
My manner of rhyming infuses progression and bars logical
So many people are striving and reading to comprehend
It just takes poetry to understand, so I'm inspired to do it till THE END
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Old 01-16-04, 01:40 AM   #2
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I was inspired once, but it wasn't for real. So I shrugged it off. I wonder if your inspiration was for real.

I really liked this peice. It was great all around, with no flaws I can see. What's more to say? Well... I wasn't feeling it. Only 'cause I didn't feel like there was anything to "feel". But this was certainly flawless, this had to be one of those peices where you're writing and you can't seem to write fast enough to get the words down. It definitly feels like that.
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Old 01-16-04, 08:44 AM   #3
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yup, this was originally shorter but i decided to make it longer to see whatchall think of it and add more to it. i stopped writing it basically because it didnt have any emotion in it, but i still liked it. it was written almost perfectly but emotionless....
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Old 01-16-04, 02:26 PM   #4
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i can agree that you did this emotionless.... its a great peice none the less though, and yes it was written perfectly
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