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Old 01-18-04, 11:48 AM   #1
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Verbal Illness, Medicinal Healing

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Verbal Illness, Medicinal Healing

I'm the bringer of common cold, Lukemia and blood clots,
Female; now something doesn't quite join up the lyrical dots,
Hearing gunshots, a cancer of the brain with one aim to turn insane,
Shatter your limbs with my patter, splatter you lying lame,
Deaf, dumb and blind, like a virus in the mind,
Only femcee to make your intestine unwind,
A rare find; when placed faced down on the operating table,
I'm missing three vital organs, but my blood pressure's still stable!
I cut corners in battle so I rattle those points up quicker,
Lines flicker straight to your liver quicker than a litre of liqour,
Sicker than influenza , or chronic lung disease,
I spit bullets at close range; bow down on your knees,
Bronchitis, my sister had a disease just like this,
Sept' the doctor said something different...
Hepititus, A or B? Or was it conjunctivitus?
I don't remember, does that mean i have Alzeimers?
Got a verruca on my eye, I spy a wart of some sort,
Used to have night vision, now i only see it in short,
Strapped to a ventilator, told my Mom I'd see her later,
Bitch never came back to see me, guess thats why I'm a hater,
Highly contagus..on a scale no one can gauge us,
This is one for Corrupted Visionz, more illness coming up!

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Old 01-18-04, 11:56 AM   #2
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that was a good verse
you had some whitty lines
i liked this punch best
Lines flicker straight to your liver quicker than a litre of liqour,

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Old 01-18-04, 11:56 AM   #3
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pretty nice by my standards.. sum nice lines that made me laugh :P keep uppin. peep my new piece please.

"Hepititus, A or B? Or was it conjunctivitus?
I don't remember, does that mean i have Alzeimers?" = my fav line.. for sum reason lol.
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Old 01-18-04, 12:01 PM   #4
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yeah, that was my fave line too...lol it just popped into my head and i was like, shit, this is dope for me! LOL, i actually think i'm getting better! LMAO

keep da compliments coming!

By the way, i used to be called Liba Dee, this name is a more common alias and a new start for me...keep peepin the shyt!
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Old 01-18-04, 12:21 PM   #5
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Uppin this shyt!
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Old 01-18-04, 12:56 PM   #6
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can i get some more replies?
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Old 01-18-04, 01:58 PM   #7
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..Nice..I didn't reconize the name at first...until I went into crew chat..anywas..this was decent..it flowed well..I thought the content was lacking a little..but..other than that..it's alright...

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Old 01-18-04, 04:49 PM   #8
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yeah this was pretty good.....made a good read....structure was pretty good.....you had some good flow in this, it was pretty smooth i thought....had some good vocab in there....the content was alright i thought....but overall this was pretty good, enjoyed the read....keep at it.
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Old 01-18-04, 05:10 PM   #9
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good flow , good structure , vocab was good..keep writin.. Peace
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Old 01-19-04, 02:36 PM   #10
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