Yo Yall Watch Me Put This Foo To Bed/
This Fool So Wack I Can Take Him Sittin On My Head//
Not really feeling this opening.. The punch here isnt really directed not that hard of one either
Look At These Lyrically Fine,well Designed Lines Of Mine/
Solgoob You An Alright Dude But Was Born With No Lines Or Even Rymes//
the flow of it could be better, no real punch of meta
Ima Kill This Foo Right After Spittin This 5th Line/
Sol Thinks Im The Only Mc To Merk Him But Soon They'll Be All Kinds//
i was expecting a little more on your follow through.. the setup hadme thinking your next line was gunna be extreamly hard hitting, and it wasnt
U Lil Stupid Wack Goofy Guy Known As A Newbie/
U So Wack Its Blah Just Like What Every One Heres Outta Scooby//
your starting to lose me a little, i think some rewording would have saved this bar.. maybe make it a little more direct with the punchs/
U A Rookie A Mommas Boy That Everyone Probably Calls Pookie/
I Can Kill This Herb Even If I Was To Bust Like Special Officer Doofy//
um.. not really feeling this ending, the follow through had potentual, but your setup isnt a hard hitting one, you lacked some strength with your punchs...

Over all i think you should try directing your verse more twords dissing your opponent, work on the creativity it seemed sorta of rushed and generic.. Your metas are ok, but need a little better guidence when your spitting them... Try going for more punchs than metas though.




Skill wise this battle is like Allen Iverson Vs. Ronald Murray//You need to practise your shit,You heard me//
opening is eh. straight diss i suppose... not much of a metaphor
Your type dont concern me//You must have written in a hurry//
[/b] kind of a filler, follow through could have had more to it[/b]
Was that a battle verse or were you trying to be flirty//This fag ante 17 he's over 30//
ok attemp ok the personal.. Punch wasnt the hardest for setup or follow through
I'd say I'm gonna rip you a new one but you'd probely think I was talking dirty//Your verse only matches par, I'm better like a birdie//
it connects to the other bars well, with a decent punch.. but the follow through could have come harder with the meta punch
How come you think your good, you arent even wordy//and there wont be a rematch cause you arent worthy//
not much of punchs here
Here's a wake up like the blue pill//I'm real ill//
eh, this line could use some rewording, maybe strech it out a little bit, try for a harder direct punch
Your the counterfiet, I'm the real deal//You dont have talent or skill//
not the best as far as punchs go, but direct. Metaphor could have been spit a little better
If you think your hot this will put you on chill//Your nothing this is a daily drill.
ending wasnt to specil.. um wasnt much of a hard hitting punch or metaphor


Over all your verse was straight with punchs, had metaphors in there although they could use a little work.. I wasexpecting to see a little more personal punchs in your verse but it wasnt bad.

Vote-Solgooberdier
He came with constant punchs, had metaphors with an alright flow.. Krakka t's verse seemed sort of generic and strayed away from directed disses..

Both yall need to stop swaying votes

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