Us guys get the blame but you bitches just the same/
playing games so you really just can't complain.
Everybody gets played and everybody part-takes/
Everybody goes thorugh tears and their heart breaks.
But females like to act better...thoughts materialistic/
end of the day you still a dumb bitch with cheap lipistick.
You're own fault talking like females more mature/
and still fall for the same shit...you whore.
I don't lie when I tell you how I feel I really mean it/
I'm not just saying some shit 'cos I think it's convenient.
I only say what is honest so you're gonna have to face it/
I don't like you but our time we should embrace it.
You can choose to deal with it or not it's no loss/
but if you give it up so soon than no wonder you're tossed.
No longer need or respect I could never date you's/
you just fuck arounds...not enough credentials.
I need to feel a connection and the affection/
not about looking at eachother but in the same direction.
Spend years together, go through tough times and more/
but if the bitch breaks my heart I'll break her jaw.

Eh...

This was ok, the emotion was definately there.
Some decent flow displayed.

But ya vocab, metas, and wordplay were sadly lacking.

Work on complexity.

This was all straight forward and that's good for a conversation.

But rap needs some life to it.

Good for a newbie effort, though.

Peace

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.. I Went Ova This Wit The Beat "I Really Mean It! It Wuz Totally Off-Track ..
.. Iuno if That Wuz Ur Intention or Now ..
.. Liked The Lipstick Line tho ..
.. 6.5/10 ..

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if you wanna see I REALLY MEAN IT read my POST shit check this shit out cuz...

YOUR FUCKIN TRASH BOI PEEP THE MASTER SHIT...


RED
LIGHTS IMA BEEM IT
BOUNCE an I SKEMED IT
READ IT an WEAP kid cuz...

I~REALLY~MEAN~IT

I SEEN IT an BEEN it
BELIEVE IT I DREAMED IT
IM MEAN an Im LEANIN cuz...

I~REALLY~MEAN~IT

its GREEN its for ME an its
CHEAP and its FREE its a KI
its a G B you SEEN IT I MEAN IT I
FIEN to get ICED OUT type to
TAKE YO BIKE out RIGHT OUT
YO SPOKES YOU JOKE...

I~REALLY~MEAN~IT

its all about the slight a hand
man
despite a man standin on yo block
with a rifle an he trife an wifey
tellin me to stay home
the grey zone shown me whos owns me cuz you know...

I~REALLY~MEAN~IT

STOP DROP AN ROLL you
COPPED OFF a FOLE I
stopped off and strolled SO

I~REALLY~MEAN~IT

IM BANGIN AT THE TELLI
she JAMMIN on my CELLI
tell me who dat who dat yo

I~REALLY~MEAN~IT



and this just quick frees on keys shit you best to step it up kid...i aint lettin up kid...

this aint even tryin yo AINT EVEN TRYIN...

yeah and if you cant make sense of it then you really dont get it...

aight fucka i steped it up a notch peep it...

i gotta keep shittin this aint writen its freestyle
im typin fast now to convert it to keystyle
a free file...
you can bank it record it crank it spank it you whores can
thank it shank it rank it fits in a box you be trippin an
lippin spittin up cocks you shocked your caught you think
im santana
i aint roc-a-fella
an this aint a bandana
its canada this aint sweet london an i ran a da
border holdin a 44 flippin at quarter im
shorter an stalky you keep tryin to block me
watch me words slur cop da bur bur
pop you droped roll up a sure blurr
words sure fake cuz you cant relate
you tryin to grab me but i change shape
you thinkin you had me with a lame rape
ya dames great an shes late im shakein my plate
while you hatin i make dollars
i got barrels of barrels to pop collars
shot callers referees an da dot haulers
they micro you tyco i might go to sleep now
ya too week to even speak you just eat chow
an i reak now im on the street now how i get
followed from houston like the apollo its hollow
its tip top shot at your waistline your here for deals
im here to waste time you a little fish tryin bite
the bait line and if not then let it be known for a
minute there aint no prize no limits an no gimmicks
if this is a farm team i dont expect to win it im
finished im stupid i cant call it shoot did you understand that? ...
keep sittin here tryin to understand rap...

that "Free" wuz off too..

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