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Old 01-26-04, 08:20 PM   #1
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They say life's a bitch,i got puckered lips waiting for the Kiss/
2 symbolize the end of the date when i'm Dismissed/
And when i'm Gone my legacy will hopefully live On/
Through the people that loved me 2 the ones that figured me Wrong/
At my funeral read my most personal Poems and Songs/
Have anyone that i've crossed paths with negative or Otherwise/
Tell the truth about me: rather they cry or are happy to see my Demise/
Schedule it so the weather will Symbolize my life:light rain with thick Fog/
Have my sister explain to everybody i lived and died for a Cause/
Pick my mother up tell her to gather herself and stop crying,dry her eyes if you Can/
Gather my Fam and have them remember and laugh about watching the boy become a Man/
Script July 24,1984-to whatever day it Is/
Have my last breath witnessed by my mother,brother,father and if God Permits,a wife and Kids/
Tell em i'm going to a better place and my soul may now Rest/
In the obituarary let it read:"2DAY A MAN LEFT,YET HIS SOUL CAN'T BE DAMAGED BY MERE DEATH/
Make sure the preacher talks about my last heartbeat and how i shed two finalTears/
One for my future in Heaven the last for my sinful past that i'm leaving down Here/

I'm out

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Old 01-27-04, 10:53 AM   #2
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Old 01-27-04, 11:56 AM   #3
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not bad... not bad at all... flow was cool... slipped here n' there but no biggie... content good... pretty slick... get a 2nd verse n hook could be a hot joint...
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Old 01-27-04, 12:48 PM   #4
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not bad... not bad at all... flow was cool... slipped here n' there but no biggie... content good... pretty slick... get a 2nd verse n hook could be a hot joint...

stop saying what I'm going to say!!!
this was cool~I must admit..I have read better from you..although this still is better than half of the shit on here..peace..
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Old 01-27-04, 12:53 PM   #5
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thought you handlled the sylllable's well mostly, should keep oit like the first line, a good amount, nice and smooth... after the first bar you changed the rhyming, should have carried it further, then into another... but the internals helped that out so it kept it going.... yeah a decent drop here..... [another freepost by penskills i see...lol].....
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Old 01-27-04, 12:59 PM   #6
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yes Penskills is addicted 2 freeposting. I've dropped much better but all in all i like it
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Old 01-27-04, 01:00 PM   #7
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Yo decent shit man.....very decent........flow was good....im not one to say negative things but we only get better with times.....good drop here dawg........keep doing your thing........
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Old 01-27-04, 03:11 PM   #8
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Old 01-27-04, 05:40 PM   #9
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It was dope for being boring.

Uhm be on this look-out for his hot Single:
"I Sqeezed the Rubber Duck"
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Old 01-27-04, 06:39 PM   #10
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uppin it cuz i can
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Old 01-28-04, 02:48 PM   #11
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y would i up this? cuz i can and i'm your father
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Old 01-28-04, 04:05 PM   #12
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dope man flow waz nice now read my dream
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