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Bordem
IP: 4287 3F49
They say life's a bitch,i got puckered lips waiting for the Kiss/
2 symbolize the end of the date when i'm Dismissed/ And when i'm Gone my legacy will hopefully live On/ Through the people that loved me 2 the ones that figured me Wrong/ At my funeral read my most personal Poems and Songs/ Have anyone that i've crossed paths with negative or Otherwise/ Tell the truth about me: rather they cry or are happy to see my Demise/ Schedule it so the weather will Symbolize my life:light rain with thick Fog/ Have my sister explain to everybody i lived and died for a Cause/ Pick my mother up tell her to gather herself and stop crying,dry her eyes if you Can/ Gather my Fam and have them remember and laugh about watching the boy become a Man/ Script July 24,1984-to whatever day it Is/ Have my last breath witnessed by my mother,brother,father and if God Permits,a wife and Kids/ Tell em i'm going to a better place and my soul may now Rest/ In the obituarary let it read:"2DAY A MAN LEFT,YET HIS SOUL CAN'T BE DAMAGED BY MERE DEATH/ Make sure the preacher talks about my last heartbeat and how i shed two finalTears/ One for my future in Heaven the last for my sinful past that i'm leaving down Here/ I'm out Last edited by Gunman tha Great : 01-27-04 at 11:34 AM. |
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IP: 4287 3F49
upinn this thang
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I'm an alias...
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IP: A092 9E01
not bad... not bad at all... flow was cool... slipped here n' there but no biggie... content good... pretty slick... get a 2nd verse n hook could be a hot joint...
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IP: 4577 CD9A
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![]() this was cool~I must admit..I have read better from you..although this still is better than half of the shit on here..peace.. |
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1E
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
thought you handlled the sylllable's well mostly, should keep oit like the first line, a good amount, nice and smooth... after the first bar you changed the rhyming, should have carried it further, then into another... but the internals helped that out so it kept it going.... yeah a decent drop here..... [another freepost by penskills i see...lol].....
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IP: 4287 3F49
yes Penskills is addicted 2 freeposting. I've dropped much better but all in all i like it
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"The Eleete"
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IP: 0630 0104
Yo decent shit man.....very decent........flow was good....im not one to say negative things but we only get better with times.....good drop here dawg........keep doing your thing........
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IP: 4287 3F49
uppin this thang
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Middle Weight
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IP: 7929 82B1
It was dope for being boring.
Uhm be on this look-out for his hot Single: "I Sqeezed the Rubber Duck" .................................................. ..
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IP: 4287 3F49
uppin it cuz i can
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IP: 4287 3F49
y would i up this? cuz i can and i'm your father
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IP: D3A3 E133
dope man flow waz nice now read my dream
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