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2nd song from "Unlimited Wisdom"-"Deliver me"
IP: 6F9E F23B
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109180 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...382#post1130382 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...383#post1130383 Deliver Me Verse 1 I’m lost in action…Caught in a verbal Transaction Counter Productive times…Losing my sense to fiction Counter fiction…Fake ideas begin to ruin my mind I feel I’m caught behind…Ten steps behind sometimes That’s behind the leading pack…I feel I can’t compete When I try to win fair…People resort to hate and cheat Like rain and sleet…My soul begins to rain cold pain Where I was a fighter before…Now I’m tame and lame But the anger beings to grow…Spitting Blood from my soul Losing control…trying my hardest not to let go Of my minds Sanctuary…A place it can sit and rest Without resorting to Anger, Hate and Distress Chorus Deliver me from This evil That’s plaguing My thoughts I’m at an odds end…No longer Can I control My thoughts But my own Sanatorium keeps me living sane Til the day I perish away…And my memory no longer remains (X2) Verse 2 My bloods running cold…A deep Scarlet river Running in my veins…To my heart it delivers A lease of life...The elixir that keeps it beating Keeps it humming away in the background...Keeps me living Keeps Me moving…Keeps me and My thoughts running Strong Keeps them Teasing me…Keeps them pushing me along Makes me want to succeed…Then makes me want to fail Keeps my brain ticking…Slow as the pace of a snail Like a mathematical equation…I’m hard to figure out And if my chapter ended now…I still wouldn’t be happy somehow Cos I strive to be more…Deep in my heart want to succeed And if I don’t get to the higher plain…Don’t matter, I’ll achieve Chorus Deliver me from This evil That’s plaguing My thoughts I’m at an odds end…No longer Can I control My thoughts But my own Sanatorium keeps me living sane Til the day I perish away…And my memory no longer remains |
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thought, the first verse was decent, little bit of wordplay, a smooth flow and the content was ok, and feeling in it, but the second i didnt like the 'keeps' thing, didnt really match with the first verse...return the favour
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IP: 6F9E F23B
ta......just a concept I had bubblin bout....Thanx for the feedbak...
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IP: 6F9E F23B
Actually, I Said That The First Track Was The Best He Ever Lay Down But This Is Just As Tight.
I Rekon He Has Equalled Himself. You Got A High Plato To Keep On Now Boi. |
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IP: 6F9E F23B
cheers mate....maybe u'll be gud as me one day...jokes...
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IP: 4287 3F49
i enjoyed it, anymore questions?
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IP: 6F9E F23B
uppin
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