aiyo niggaz lookin at me like big screens
so i guess i got enough to smash ya team
i mean.....mothafucka you talk ya trash
but the samething that hit Pac will hit ya ass
yeah.....my boy jus gotta gun shop
thats means my foes gettin chewed up like gum drops
fagget.....i need no bitch
everytime i load a clip , i get hard off that shit
uhh......i nut when i bust, i spit when i cuss so i wet all you sluts
snitch....go and run ya mouth
i find out ya address and send a hollow threw ya couch
fakes.....stay out my range
all i need is 60 feet to blow out ya brains
i am insane, never was right in my dome '
after moms gave me life i started wreckin her home
thats why iam all alone, never in crowds,never in factions
i melt every key on the board when i tap em
iam done, iam finsh typing these letters
let me roll up a blunt and make myself better

UNO

It's cool, but what's your point? In the end...you're mad at the world, you smoke weed, you are an awful child, and violent as hell. But I guess this is kind of what happens when a person becomes self-centered. I think you got skills but stop thinking about you. If you're going to smoke, smoke and focus on something else. Open up your world to something past you and make room for the rest of us to fit it.

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Rev 12:11 - Use your voice...

shit topic.... this is 'open mic'....... plus the scheme was basic stuff... with a choppy flow, even your bars out a bit.... and find something, worth writing about, that others will be interested in......

This was ok.....try to even your lines up a bit though, some of them were really short....try adding some better multies to this though....flow was ok, got off at points though through out the piece.....but keep at it.