I think you should know i'm here to make things clear,
and you would be right i am the newbie here,
I'm pissed off at the world they wont gimme a chance,
all i get is black-listed and labelled at first glance,
I just wanna shot, that's not asking alot,
I battle any mother fucker and still get more applause,
I wont pause, people say its worthless,
but i think it's worth it,the only thing that gives my life purpose,
if i could get paid for cursin my life would be perfect,
But evidently that's not the case,
im not livin in god's good grace, can't wait
to see god's face when i end up in his place,
he left something misplaced and that was a mistake,
I get no help from you,in all this hell i go through,
but you dont have to worry about when the rent's due,
or who your girl screws,no disrespect meant to you

I just want to end these pains and worries,
whiteout the game with flurries containing so much fury,
most the stories end with me and a jury,
fuck enought spice girls to start makin curry,
Its a sad story i know,but im glad to know,
i still have time to grow,and by the time im shown,
I'll never be referred to as an unknown.....



let me know what you think...... i need some advice....thx...:}-~

way too simple..your wordplay is just too simple..after few lines reader can guess what's coming next..your content was decent at least..

thx man i appreciate it.... i do see the simplicity too.....mleh unwritten keystyles are not my specialty....heh..thx again :}-~

gimme some more feedback anyone.