Flowery italics - presenting a type of story that's sung,
I'm lying witness to an atrocity in which the jury is hung.
Unbacked opinions in a land where its savage rage is truth
Amongst squalls of feeble minds will reign the advantageous youth
I'm understandably shaken - you can see my eyes in wonderment. .
When listening to make-shift opinions which demonize the government
Authenticity ruined it all; & as soon as my demeanor passes go
I'll collect $200, advancing past the teenage status quo:
Again: authenticity; barely floating, I'm alive but the rumor isn't. .
Morale's in the gutter next to a bloody and dying consumerism
I feel like a saviour; &, my cheeks rosy, I'm bashful and pass on
While, before my eyes, the glass goes from half full to half gone
Molding minds. . Mother Nature won't cry until the needle hits her
So, I'll sacrifice a few for a lot - & take the role 'cerebral Hitler'
Don't second-guess, trust: your prose won't test or rue
& respect the movers, trust again:
we know what's best for you.

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he's one of the best on the net ..
and you bitches aren't replying,
check ya selves! , this was dope
as hell, niiiiiiiiiiiiiiiice lines, get me
on aim to discuss furthur thoughts

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Yes..this is an extremely dope piece..
Again..you blow me away completely with your vocab..just beautiful..
The idea..is very well thought out..
Many quotables are in here..flow was interestingly created..
I wish I could say more..I'll try and come back with more in-depth feedback..

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Soft Focus
Suicide Inc.
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Ghost-Writers

Retarded people's heads are to big..I'll be back with something just as funny as watching the Special Olympics..don't worry..

I'm understandably shaken - you can see my eyes in wonderment. .
When listening to make-shift opinions which demonize the government
Authenticity ruined it all; & as soon as my demeanor passes go
I'll collect $200, advancing past the teenage status quo:

Very hot verse right here, Overall, Good Realism to Topic, Almost poetic like, But could find the flow well, Nice Drop 8.5/10

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This was intensely dope once again I assumed too much...I thought this would be one of those keystyles with a million syllables in one line making it difficult to read with a flow, but went through it pretty good. Pretty good vocab and wordplay, I didn't catch too many multis but that doesn't matter this shit was ill anyway. You spoke out on the truths and that's what we need around here 8/10

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This was an awesome piece, had a good flow, good vocab, good idea. I couldn't really see much wrong with this piece, if I saw anymore of your stuff on here I'd read that as well. So keep posting and I'll keep reading.

If you could hit up my battle vs KLO I'd appreciate that, if not that's cool too. Thanks.

next messiah...enough said..