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01-28-04, 06:35 PM | #1 | ||||||
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SkiddZ N' Dev Collab: Earths Judgement
IP: 8BEC CACE
God was displeased with the world, and had regretted ever making it. But he didn't want to destroy it off, so he set up a Court for the Planets Judgement. He chose Life to defend the earth and Death to go against it. They both presented their Pleads as follows..
SkiddZ=Life Dev=Death Life: So Innocent, The unfortunate people dealin with the past of others. Which has Passed the others, since the first killing of Cains Brother We cannot help it, God knew that the world would have been sinful Falling into Pitfalls, humanity, soon enough will lead to they own fall Unfortunately, instead of facing their fate when the right time Comes They are Judged, And their fate set, Before the dawn of The young Sun In which the SUN will set, And the other SON Will Find His rise But Humans, even with sin have predicted Jesus’ Coming the 2nd Time Give them a chance, Let them know what fate you Have set for them Given their roots of Adam N Eve, Its hard to cut that off from their stem The world is at its peak, And they have almost reached their inevitable Dawn Kill them now, and who knows if they relished life that you have gave them The Lord is My shepherd, But the sheep are still are beginning to wander off Death just wants them to die, to give the Grim Reaper a Needed Vacation I can help out, I gave a follower named John a ‘Book of their Revelation’ Death: The Jurassic, crustaceous and Neolithic where times of calm When the world only had nature to inflict planetary harm Without Qualm it was healthy in a natural existence Without emissions, a wealthy organic state of resistance No mechanical devises, for instance no nuclear reactors Influencing factors draining resources to gain things faster It’s a global disaster spawned from primate evolution Cos leaving the planet scorned is our main contribution To mixed up in progress, inflicting a slow death,, misusing Cos another human another Contusion, like metaphoric bruising To the planet that’s losing the battle cos its taking the brunt From a deadly pathogen let lose on a technological hunt Cos we confront and conquer, with a wake of destruction Now introduction to other planets, then it’ll be production But holidays in outer space, wouldn’t make it thru customs A higher power would intervene the disease and crush them An end to earth so the universe escapes,, human combustion God has Made his decision, but only a choice few know. I must tell thee, Repent now, the Sun is about to set.. |
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01-28-04, 06:43 PM | #2 | ||||
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WOW....now this here is dope...you guys broke it down perfectly...I don't even no what else to say????...I'm gonna put this up for OM of the month..(although mine and Sub.D's collab's gonna be tighter)..
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01-28-04, 07:41 PM | #3 | ||||
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Yeah..it's hard to say anything else on this piece except it was completely dope
SkiddZ..hmm..liked how you approached life..thought the lines were a little stretched but it didn't affect anything so it really didn't matter..just looking for something to say.. Dev..great vocab..again..nothing much more to say..this piece was just dope..I'd nominate it for that monthly thing..but Penskills already did..dope
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01-28-04, 07:44 PM | #4 | |||||||
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thnx... reading it back thru... as a whole i like it.....
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01-29-04, 02:50 AM | #5 | |||||||
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come on.... whats with the sleeping
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01-29-04, 02:54 AM | #6 | |||||||
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Dope. . Not Much you Can About This Piece Right Here. . Skiddz, Dev. . You Both Did Your Parts VERY Ill-like. . Skiddz, Flow Was A Little Off. . Watch It. . Dev, Your Shit Was Flawless. . Vocab Was Great, Flow Ws On-Point. . Both Of You Just Dope-a-fied This All Up, Very Impressive. . Pz.
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01-29-04, 04:28 AM | #7 | ||||
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SKiddy nice to see u droppin .. havent read lateley, .. but this was nice from both, ncie collabo here, ncie vobac usage flowed good.. & u worked good together in this collab, .. i feld this piece, .. keep it up holmes, ..
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01-29-04, 04:47 AM | #8 | |||||||
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very nice piece, a joy to read, you had topic, flow, vocab nearly every thing in this peice. so like every1 else sed, this woz completly dope.
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01-29-04, 11:20 AM | #9 | ||||||
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IP: 8BEC CACE
Yay, they like it!!! they really like it!!!
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01-29-04, 11:23 AM | #10 | ||||||
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for a collab it is a cut above most and i like the life/death spittin its been done bare times but this is a top 5 collab...
nice.. killa.. |
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01-29-04, 02:55 PM | #11 | |||||||
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thnx people... its all appreciated....
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01-30-04, 05:40 AM | #12 | |||||||
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any more,.,,,
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01-30-04, 01:27 PM | #13 | ||||
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I'm more than impressed fam... fuckin good job...
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01-30-04, 01:28 PM | #14 | ||||||
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IP: 8BEC CACE
Thank You..
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01-30-04, 08:36 PM | #15 | |||||||
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very nice...i won't say impressive because i already knew you had skills...dev your piece was almost perfect...the flow was prfectly paced...never had a second to take a breath and stop readin..skiddz some of your lines were stretched but your verse was extremeely effectual at addressign the topic, you never lost sight, dev gto lost in the rhyme a few times..but you kept the rhyme tight and kept defendin your point...the intro and outro are uneccessary...btu that's really up to you...maybe the intro shoudl stay, the outro eh...im not sure, anyway taht's my only real criticism...excellent drop..but like pen said...we're gonna be better..lol
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Worthy of awe and praise Respect "..Very nice..Very emotional...real Deep piece..I really enjoyed reading this..there are few good writers on this site..and I think they are good cause simply they write some good shit..but..rarely I enjoy reading a piece..but..this was fantastic..peace.."
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