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01-31-04, 05:58 PM
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Dealing with depression Ft. Speek E.Z & Straight Ace
IP: 77D5 6AAD
Speek E.z...
Caught In My Unholy Confessions, The Way I Deal With Depression.. Love Was A Lost Investment, That Didn’t Come To Me With Succession.. She Had Me Second Guessing, Did She Truly Love Or Was She Just Messing.. My Mind Was Always Stressing, Unaware Of The Depth Of Loves Lesson.. A Fool Struck By Cupid’s Arrow, Who Thought That You Might Just Feel Me.. But The Chances Are Slim To Zero, Because I Had To Deal With True Reality.. And What I See Is You And Him, With No Remnants Of Our Loveless Past.. I Look Back On What I Could’ve Been, But I Jumped In Head First, Just To Fast.. Now There Is Nothing Left For Me, I Feel No Reason In Going On And Living.. But I Just Want You To Wait And See, The Outcome Of My New Life’s Beginning.. The word keep on sliding.. in ways of different expressions... but we all deal in our own way, with our deepest depressions.. Straight Ace.. Dwellin' upon past..cant let it go.. Been livin in Atlantis like reality was masked.. Corners get company, as i face off the truth & the earth.. Reconsider all my possibilities which i didnt take.. Since my birth, ...Lots of thoughts canter through my mind.. ..All bringin more questions.. Instead of that one answer im desperate to find.. Mindset shines through..through these writings...Just see.. How this paragraph looks clutterd...like my sanity.. Cold gusts creep through holes, movin the paper..i slip.. Deform the next letter.. I cry as i hear my nails..slippin from my sense & losin grip.. The word keep on sliding.. in ways of different expressions... but we all deal in our own way, with our deepest depressions.. Edicius... I looked into the sky facing this cold faceless expression, my eyes closed & in my mind confessing this confession.. While a cold breeze of almost freezing wind past me by.. the answer flowed away & the wonder stays why?.. I cant figure out the way that it suposed to be.. why the struggle keeps tightening & the ways getting smaller.. for me to feel free.. still my darkside is exosed but i didnt asked for this the puzzle unable to finish, cause of this pieces i miss.. But i dont know what happend but inside it snapped, the reasons seemed stupid.. but its me that cant forget.. I wish that i could, but i just feel that i cant.. U are just in my heart so deep... Still my beloved.. please u must understand.. ur not, but close to an obsession What ever people think!.. I guess i cant deal with my kind of depression..
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01-31-04, 06:07 PM
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IP: C1DA C961
damn...all i can say is dope.............no other words...just dope...nice imagery..ace especially..
Mindset shines through..through these writings...Just see.. How this paragraph looks clutterd...like my sanity.. damn...keep droppin
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01-31-04, 06:09 PM
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\/ pissing me off!!!!
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wow, all the verses in this were quite dope, a conisistant piece.
some of the worst structurization i've ever seen!!!  nah it wasnt too bad!!the immagery was pretty good, the chorus was dope. all the verses were equally good, so i aint gone pick out any one although edicus was after killing me earlier, nice verse edicus keep it up boys
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01-31-04, 06:17 PM
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This was a good collab, I didn't really feel the styles compliment each other, but thats not hating, thats just being picky, I thought speak e z had a nice consistant flow, while edicius and had a more interesting flow but i was feeling speak e z more, yet all flowed very nice. The depth was maintained by edicius, I was feeling your verse, I've read it many a time already, its very relative to many peoples life, there wasn't much on the base of cleevr wording or metas, but that wasn't necessary, since this was emotional, i think the lyrics would be very easy to put emotion into due to the good writing, well dne guys
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01-31-04, 06:42 PM
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like dazasta sed, jus dope, thats all, its flawless, everythin is perfect i think, keep up tha good work
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01-31-04, 09:06 PM
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I agree this was a nice piece here guys....I liked all 3 verses....Speeks verse had some good lines i thought in it that were true, such as his second line in his verse, i could relate to that line....Ace's verse was good as well, had good feeling in it i thought, i liked the way you ended it....Eds verse was nice, he had some good imaginary in it, i liked that, had good lines in there.....overall a nice collab guys...keep at it.
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02-01-04, 10:15 AM
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a dope peice...all came hard...
dope all around...wordplay etc... favorite line... "Mindset shines through..through these writings...Just see.. How this paragraph looks clutterd...like my sanity.. " dope as fuck... Keep Spittin... |
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02-01-04, 10:54 AM
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IP: 399E F0FD
nice peice
Speak E.Z.- nice verse, very good verse to open with, more of the basic verse out of these 3 but explained more of the title and exposed this peice more then the rest. Straight Ace- couldnt get a flow to this peice nor did i understand it untill the sanity line came up, now i know what you were trying to do and it came off good, good vocab and wordplay through this peice Edicus- dopest of all 3 verses, had some trouble with flow but wordplay and structure made up for it, good vocab and imaginery
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02-01-04, 10:54 AM
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IP: 399E F0FD
forgot to drop a link
hit my peice up since i hit your peice up if you can thanx http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...661#post1139661
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02-01-04, 10:57 AM
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IP: 77D5 6AAD
^The flow is not hard to catch, i just stop using a simple rhyme sheme at a point, ill rpely to yours, .. thnx .. & upper..
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02-01-04, 10:58 AM
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very nice piece...this was a rare collab that turned out very well...I enjoyed all verse but...to me Ed verse was most enjoyable...nice work fellas~~~~peace~~~
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02-01-04, 11:16 AM
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i enjoyed the flow yall..nice vocab, creativity, and rhyme sceme
very nice..i'm ganna keep an eye out for your verses for now on...hot peace |
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02-01-04, 03:52 PM
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Real nice.. each verse captured the topic well..
Tight vocab used.. every aspect was tight more or less.. deep.. Dope verses from all three... |
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02-01-04, 05:38 PM
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nice peice
Speak E.Z.- nice verse, very good verse to open with, more of the basic verse out of these 3 but explained more of the title and exposed this peice more then the rest. Straight Ace- couldnt get a flow to this peice nor did i understand it untill the sanity line came up, now i know what you were trying to do and it came off good, good vocab and wordplay through this peice Edicus- dopest of all 3 verses, had some trouble with flow but wordplay and structure made up for it, good vocab and imaginery *returns speek favor* this was cool This was a good collab, I didn't really feel the styles compliment each other, but thats not hating, thats just being picky, I thought speak e z had a nice consistant flow, while edicius and had a more interesting flow but i was feeling speak e z more, yet all flowed very nice. The depth was maintained by edicius, I was feeling your verse, I've read it many a time already, its very relative to many peoples life, there wasn't much on the base of cleevr wording or metas, but that wasn't necessary, since this was emotional, i think the lyrics would be very easy to put emotion into due to the good writing, well dne guys Last edited by Emerge : 02-01-04 at 06:03 PM. |
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