very dope piece. kinda loss the flow and structure towards the end but it didn't
have too bad of an effect on the piece. it was no doubt a great read. especially
how it was based on a true story. it was heartfelt and well written. the flip
at the end made it all the more better. very good use of repetition.
keep at it man.

hit this up in return plz
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113569

pz

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Wat the fuck was that about,,,,you all seemed to like it but what was it a rap???
It read like an wilfred owen peom,,but not about the war!!!

If I told you you have a nice body, would you hold it against me???

this was fantastic Baxter...your flow was flawless, your scheme was interesting, and don't even get me started on the content. This was almost as dope as they come. Pretty damn close. Pardon me while I cum in my pants.

I especially liked the part where he died

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