Does absence make the heart grow fonder?
Thus passions take a start and go farther!

I miss you, every last part of your being
I would act out for everyone if you are seeing
Where are you, I wake up alone at night
Searching the covers, alone and in fright
Dream of you as my security blanket
Cover my fears, shielding me quick
Ignorance is bliss, do I contradict
Life without you encompassing me
Dream a little dream of me...

I dream of you and I don’t want to wake
Someone asked me a question today...

What’s your biggest fear?

You have painted a picture here or longing and lonliness. In many ways I can definitely see where you are coming from and I am sure many can identify with you. Losing someone hurts infintely worse when you truely love them. I hope you find that someone again someday.

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Poetry.. nice, .. ^ like stated a very good picture u potraited, here.. some lines made me think, that was very good.. vocab was very good & on point.. but what stood out here was the depth, & i believe in poetry thats the goal to reach for a writer, the deepness in a piece, and u acomplished that in this one, so very good =) i liked it man .. Props..

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Fuck you

Can Def. see the emotion here..... very nice man = )

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Did I Beat You Before?
Yeah, Probably

-An Original RB Member: Yes, We're That Much Better-

booooooooo!

Emotion was great I liked the way you put forth this piece very well done i think you should make another verse for it because this was good another verse or two this would make a great audio track

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

thank you all

any ways in can improve on this?

Strange Soda? I like it

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Have We Met Before?

Acro Nim

It's great as it is, but if you really want my attention then maybe adding a little bit more atmosphere. I see your bed, I see it is night, but why not make the night a bit more interesting? sounds, sights, smells... maybe less on the smells...