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Old 02-14-04, 01:38 PM   #1
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no voice in the void spoken softer than silent
no remote control to change the channel from violent
seeing red with out eyes open heart broken no cash coins or token
like a halloween mask at christmas out of place without face
blank as the paper penless and dormant
no outlet or reprive from this continual torment
counterclockwise on the face of time
every breath is an uphill climb
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Old 02-15-04, 08:37 PM   #2
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i thin u dun have any replies because peps dunno how to respond to a piece thats so short in length...

but i would think you'd get more seeing as its less for them to read...if they really do read em...

but i muz say this piece was deep...even started off so... "no voice in the void spoken softer than silent"

now im not the greatest analyst of what this means an all that but ima say great..the complexity really intreged me an made it a fun read
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Old 02-17-04, 12:13 PM   #3
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thanks, it was meant to be short, say a lot with a little....
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Old 02-17-04, 04:57 PM   #4
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Really short in all aspects and the message came through faded...Maybe another verse would have been nice but at the least I like what you had to say

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