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02-18-04, 06:33 PM | #1 | |||||||
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Bar After Bar
IP: 6C77 F1E9
People done pushed me, shoved me, hated me, loved me
Left me to handle shit solo when thangs turned ugly But shit is all good, cuz I'ma remember tha name When the hustle takes tha number one contender to fame Bar after bar, I bomb intense flows You'll always be number 2 like common pencils You niggaz betta cut wit that greedy talk man Cuz when my clips is spittin, its not on your cd walkman I'm focused, on tha grind, bout to make this money Blood, sweat, n tears is in this, try to take this from me I'm gonna kill, if I have to kill to feed my family If this rhyme shit don't work out, I got weed as plan B Verse after verse, I'm sick, don't try put my nikes on Gotta problem wit my values or beliefs, write me calm Cuz if you explode on Jerzey, you might be bombed You can diss, talk shit behind my back, but hatred pushes me Gets me amped in this game like I just swooshed a three So hop off my dick, damn homie, what a pain you are I came too far, my brains too scarred, you shoulda heard When I spit bar after bar, verse after verse, word after word... Feedback...
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02-18-04, 08:12 PM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: 6C77 F1E9
uppin...
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02-19-04, 02:46 AM | #3 | ||||
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IP: 1696 068C
ehhh..this could have been better..it showed emotion..but thats it..it had feelings..but..needed more content..so..work on that a lil more..also try to get some internal rhyme..such as multis and spice it up with some metas or similies..peace..
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02-19-04, 12:48 PM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: B20F 67F7
I thought it was pretty good myself kinda gave me a Joe Budden feel to it
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02-19-04, 04:52 PM | #5 | |||||||
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IP: 1A0F 98EA
thanx yall...good lookin for the response...uppin for more feedback...
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02-19-04, 05:19 PM | #6 | |||||||
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IP: 6BCC E5BE
i thought it was pretty good nice job
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