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Old 03-05-04, 04:28 PM   #1
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Chalky Karlos Is Funeral Packing

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Funeral packing//
anothed deceased by mysterious stabbin//
blood stained napkin//
chalky you rap like eric clapton//

Lyrics to rip a hole in ya imagination//
chalky funeral packing you to eternal damnation//

sending you to hell with a smile on my face//
pack of cards,ya tryin to be tha king//
but you facin tha ace//
rat race,rabbit race turtle race or bunny//
spittin lyrics that only demolish findz funny//
Stabbin you with anger and enraged//
a murder to make jack the ripper look aged//
2 hours ago you were made history//
watch the page turn//
watch me spittin ma shit while you on the shelf in your urn//
i mourn ya death because you was an easy win//
i twisted ya brain like an overdose of anadin//
fucking you up like methol//
causing you pain like overused paracetamol//
neutral alkaline and acid//
ya raps was worse than the film lake placid//
Lyrics to make the cloudz dream//
ryhmes to shock like nuffing you ever seen//
chalky lick my cock till it shines//
lick it till you sprout an idea and a new ryhmes//
till ya cheeks turn red like mr mime//

so lets turn a new page of history....
life without chalky how it meant to be......
open ya eyez and finally see....
quit now and save ya dignity.......

FUCK YOU
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Old 03-05-04, 05:11 PM   #2
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...kinda basic...need to make da line longer.....vocab could be betta...but not bad for a new b.....4/10
keep it up
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Old 03-05-04, 06:15 PM   #3
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it was alright but chalky still killed you on the other threads. keep it up.
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Old 03-08-04, 09:29 AM   #4
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This was alright....nothing really special...structure needs to be fixed up, try keeping the lines around the same length....add some multies to your pieces too...your vocab was alright though....but keep at it.
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