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03-21-04, 11:52 AM | #1 | |||||||
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2nd freestyle
IP: C1DA C961
hard ta live as a man in this world,
bitches lookin down on u like a worm, they treat u like a word, and erase u from existance from this world, we do what we gotta do, we dont care if we get caught, but we wont let our souls be bought, even tho im stuck in the devils hand, which disrupts my plans, ta bein the most pure mutha fucker in these lands, im just afraid that when i gotta kill a man, god wont understand, but i hope he understand i wont be treated like a savage man, someone lash out at me and i dont lash back out at em, ill me got damned man, but remembering the towers, (9-11) ill never back down as a coward, look the devil face to face, eye to eye, ill fight the devil till the day i die.
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03-21-04, 12:19 PM | #2 | |||||||
Dont Push Me Of Regret It
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IP: 047D 3076
umm...This didn't realy have a meanin'.....it seemed a bit basic and you the word "world" used twice for a rhyme scheeme.....i fink you should try to make this more complex and look at multi' and avanced wordplay and vocab coz this was close to Wack..i dnt mean to be tight but u gota speek your mind else you won't improve...keep tryin tho.....also make da line longer....good try...pz out
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03-22-04, 03:57 PM | #3 | ||||
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IP: C1DA C961
this wasnt very good lacked ryhme scheme
lacked vocab onw love..... |
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03-22-04, 04:29 PM | #4 | |||||||
Light Weight
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IP: E3CA 7CA2
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hey not bad whats the meaning though you dont have a certain subject dogg you aint gonna make it here |
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