yo normal rules and like 15 - 25 lines ok let see yours.

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your rythmes are so simple you should go join simple plan//
ya baught your ryhmes for 99cent was called shit in a can//
at the dollastore that you hustle in front off u aint on my level//
PIMPIN up the bitches the oldest on you pimped was twelve//
tellin em you work for Santa and you one of his little elves//
take her back home and then you start spittin your shit//
she just sits their and laughs and asks you if that is it//
tells ya she heard better rymes on barney and friends//
thought your rap career just started but this is the end//
you walked into Front Lines and everyone just laughed//
not cuz you looked dumb we just never seen a black graffi//
Im Rippin you 2 peices in this battle teach ya a leasson//
once your done readin this your gun start second guessin//
that you need a new wardrobe cuz you look like a hoe//
you also should invest in some new rythmes and a flow//
you couldnt be saved if we rushed you to a hospital//
should look up a new website or maybe go into gospol//
your rap record about to be 1-2 and ima gun be reasponsible//


holla back

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this guy is still yet to spit, come on man.. lets go

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wow, I dont think this guy is gun spit its has been 1 1/2 days

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yo nice spit...ill hit this up wen he spits....hok my battle up wit an explained vote...they been gettin disqualified so give feedback....
http://community.rapbattles.com/sho...324#post1225324

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UPPIN for a mod to DQ this idiot.. still hasnt posted shit, lets get this battle closed this dude aint gun spit.

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my bad wigga i thought ione of my boy was going to post that i was away put he didn't. i spit in a minute but i want to say i was at vermont and canada.

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yo when i'm done with you you'll be screaming for a medic//
you confussin ass ryhmes are giving me a headaic//
yo my rhymes is clear as kodak//
i coming with more aminal then the chenese zodak//
i wrack you so bad that you going to need aflack//
i feel bad that you still believe in santa so i would spoil the surprise//
you got all your rap as a prize//
inside a creal box so the write by tony the tiger//
i make sure you taste the metal of my dagger//
you didn't hear me say that i don't care what people say//
you may think you hot but today ain't your day//
you got a signuter that is longer than your ryhmes//
i beat this canadans how many times?//
so if something goes wrong blame that stupid land above us//
they up there still trying to figue out how their guns bust//
the too stupid to no how to use the english system of measurment//
i put more holes in you than fifty cent//
i was driving to the border and they had to check me to see if i was ilegal and the dude was mexican//
i'm done with you and i like who next and//
you pimp french girls ha that a waste of time they too bitchy//
and when you die you body tends to be titchy//
i said it before god don't love me so i can't go to the bible//
i kill you but i'm not lyble//

get the fuck out of here man with yo bullshit

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twevle and level don't ryhme dumb ass
neither does laughed and graffi so stupid
my bad maybe in canada they do lol

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lol shady i don't mean to hate, but you need to check yah structure.

Punchs- aka
personals - aka (weak tho)
creativity - aka
wordplay - both (altho shady was confusing but I like that)
Multi's - aka
metah's - aka
flow/tructure - afa (definiatly)

shady dude u lost this battle because u don't have a rhymin scheme nor a structure. You tend to throw ur readers off, and u don't have any real punchs. I see u trying to throw 1, but ur structure is sooo off that it just weakens them. My advice look at how some of the other ppl on this board put out there verses, and spit there punchs. Now u gotta be origonal also because no1 likes recycled overplayed lines. Try and convert everything u can onto him in a simple flow which is catchy, and easy for ur readers to read. Something like 10-15 syllabels. Elevate more u got some nice wordplay tho

Aka u started off sooo weak I thought u might lose this 1, and that would have been pittiful. Ur structure altho better then shady's was weak, and also threw my off check yah line lenght drop some words if u have to. punchs where creative, and I enjoyed some off ur lines but u and shady both had alot of filler. Both of u need to do some homework on ur competitors to get better personals saying there from this country, and throwing in punchs about where he lives is soooo overplayed.

my vote aka

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o forgot again to post link here it is lokie vs yung plz vote

I also have anoter 1 that needs to get closed Lokie vs Aero

thx guys

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your rythmes are so simple you should go join simple plan//
ya baught your ryhmes for 99cent was called shit in a can//
at the dollastore that you hustle in front off u aint on my level//
PIMPIN up the bitches the oldest on you pimped was twelve//
tellin em you work for Santa and you one of his little elves//
take her back home and then you start spittin your shit//
she just sits their and laughs and asks you if that is it//
tells ya she heard better rymes on barney and friends//
thought your rap career just started but this is the end//
you walked into Front Lines and everyone just laughed//
not cuz you looked dumb we just never seen a black graffi//
Im Rippin you 2 peices in this battle teach ya a leasson//
once your done readin this your gun start second guessin//
that you need a new wardrobe cuz you look like a hoe//
you also should invest in some new rythmes and a flow//
you couldnt be saved if we rushed you to a hospital//
should look up a new website or maybe go into gospol//
your rap record about to be 1-2 and ima gun be reasponsible//

iight verse the rhyme pattren was too simple tho

e.g can plan, it shit.

come on dog get some vocab, read a dictionary or summit lol naa but seriously u need beta vocab

aka punches hit harder, and were more personal
vote a.k.a

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pretty close battle but im gonna have to give it to aka this time

Gkillaz05 Took this and it was not a bad battle A.K.A was comin strong too i was really close battle but i think GKillaz came out on top but besides that Remember GKillaz you owe me a rematch man!