yo rules

blind shit
no crew
no dr
no hate

8-10 lines max

what the fuck who voted for NIZZIE the battle hasn't even started!!!
what the fuck you idiots

Hey vote on these 4 battles honestly, and I’ll return the favor…thanks


http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=119257

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=119270

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=119249


http://community.rapbattles.com/sho...d.php?p=1231919

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Time is not long, and indecision is hells cemment. So the well is rented, untill heaven is relevant. Untill then, to be eloquent, sex cells, so le'ts cellibate.

"watch what you watchin...fox keeps feedin' us toxin's..stop sleepin' start thinkin outside of the box and unplug from the matrix doctrine....but watch what you say cause big brother is watchin" - nas - sly fox

The I.H.C.J.S.F.M.T.R.H.P.M.M.W.T.S.M.S.I.T.F.F.W.A.S. O Crew

Here it is first... since you refused to go first….man the only way you can win is coming back at rhymes….hahaha
looks like no cause you don’t have any wins. only 2 loses...

what the fuck someone voted BEFORE ANYONE SPIT WHAT THE FUCK...PLEASE TAKE THAT OUT!!!!

jokes
not really actually

here it is
yo yo

Y-N-G-Nizzie
Reading that punk ass name kinda made me dizzy,

He’s been on this site , since Jan,
OH what, still hasn’t got one single fan,
Not even a vote, come on Mr. Milli Vanilli,
Not everyone can make these rhymes so illy,
He cries when it takes me more than a minute,
Listen kid there is 5 battle losing streak limit,
Well nizzie, fuck that name sounds asian,
So that means your poor, and probably live in a days inn.
With a record like 0 and 2, you gotta elevate….
Well until you get to my level all you can do is appreciate..

cause you’ll never be here kid..
haha

haha this is blind so why is taking you solong....you can't rhyme off my shit idiot...it's been like an hour

i dont know why u think ur rhymes are so cold//
i spit hot shit leavin ur body dizzy like u had an overdose//
body burnt like some over cooked toast//
u still will never be as hot as me//
even if i set flames to ur body causin a tragedy//
ur mom wouldn't be mad //
she be thankin me by givin me head after i knock out her teeth//
u can tell me im cold at this //
im not a fag but u on my nuts like flys on shit//
but ur

i was done awhile ago but i was doin some shit my falut

are you kidding that's the most unoriginal shit i've ever written....are you serious with this?

honestly, this is the only line i liked


Not even a vote, come on Mr. Milli Vanilli,.............thats a pretty good diss...but i wasn't feelin the rest of the verse...you really need to add some substance to your personals, punchlines..everything...

and as far as for this other dude....your verse was horrible. your structure was the ONLY good part about your verse,...and your verse was so bad it made your structuyre look bad too....so fuck it...you awarded no points..and we are all now stupider from readin your verse.....my vote jpoll

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Time is not long, and indecision is hells cemment. So the well is rented, untill heaven is relevant. Untill then, to be eloquent, sex cells, so le'ts cellibate.

"watch what you watchin...fox keeps feedin' us toxin's..stop sleepin' start thinkin outside of the box and unplug from the matrix doctrine....but watch what you say cause big brother is watchin" - nas - sly fox

The I.H.C.J.S.F.M.T.R.H.P.M.M.W.T.S.M.S.I.T.F.F.W.A.S. O Crew

"even if i set flames to ur body causin a tragedy//
ur mom wouldn't be mad //
she be thankin me by givin me head after i knock out her teeth//"
- what is this? the land of no rhymes? come on. you put up a less than skilled effort against jpoll. jpoll wins.

vote = jpoll..............................you both need a tutor - not me - find another site maybe and you'll improve two as much with more influence

both were wack but j had a more disciplined flow, even structure - whack attempt at a personal - yng need to keep away from cheap shots/disses and use more quality wordplays like names e.g.


This herb-lame -- i'll nail J consistently like M-J

blah

Nod goes to JPoll...

JPoll:
Y-N-G-Nizzie
Reading that punk ass name kinda made me dizzy,

The punch is kinda silly and weak, but at least it's personal...

He’s been on this site , since Jan,
OH what, still hasn’t got one single fan,

Decent punch, still personal..

Not even a vote, come on Mr. Milli Vanilli,
Not everyone can make these rhymes so illy,

LOL...nice setup...the punch was weaker on this though...

He cries when it takes me more than a minute,
Listen kid there is 5 battle losing streak limit,

HAHAHAHA...Good punch....

Well nizzie, fuck that name sounds asian,
So that means your poor, and probably live in a days inn.

With a record like 0 and 2, you gotta elevate….
Well until you get to my level all you can do is appreciate.

Good closing, personal and nice punch.

Overall: Good flow, decent punches and pretty consistently personal; nice verse. Not sure about the "asian means your poor" shit (not sure about the psychology behind nor about the sociological reality of the statement), but that not withstanding, nice verse. Got some room to elevate a little, but obviously not a totally wack emcee.

YNGNizzie:
i dont know why u think ur rhymes are so cold//
i spit hot shit leavin ur body dizzy like u had an overdose//
body burnt like some over cooked toast//

Wack rhyme...not saying much, not personal...plus, three rhymes tends to sound awkard while flowing...

u still will never be as hot as me//
even if i set flames to ur body causin a tragedy//

Decent punch, a multi thrown in...

ur mom wouldn't be mad //

Dunno WTF this line is for...if you'd dropped "mad at me" it would've rhymed...but you didn't...so it didn't...

she be thankin me by givin me head after i knock out her teeth//

Ummm...think we can get back to a rhyme scheme? Again, had you typed "mad at me" in the line above, this line would've sorta/kinda rhymed...

u can tell me im cold at this //
im not a fag but u on my nuts like flys on shit//
but ur

Hmmm...wack closer, pretty played out using a phrase that was cliche when the word cliche was still new...Dunno if the "but ur" at the bottom was supposed to be the start of more rhyming or what...:;shrug::

Overall: Really didn't say much..flowed okay until the line stopped rhyming...but mostly, in my opinion, filler. Work on stronger punches, hitting a more personal note and avoiding played/cliched shit...

Nod to JPoll...

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I don't need to talk shit about how I'm sick n' I'm the man/I'll just sit back and let the votes show how dope I am

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i know about the asian comment...i was just writting this out really fast....haha....it doesn't make sense...but there rest is okay for how fast i wrote it

uppin i need to close some battles....vote honestly on this shit....................