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Do You Think Kids Should Have Guns In The Fifth?

Nice, Young Lady

Thats Why Kids Shouldnt Have Guns To Play With
No Pain When U Get Shot In The Head? Thats A Myth

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What Do You Think About Unloading Them?

Nice, Young Lady

Kids Shouldnt Have Guns, Their Weaker Than Stems
Parents Should Know This, Kids Are Their Gems

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Well, Thank You For Your Time

Nice, Young Lady

Anytime...Anytime..

Random Drunk Guy

Well Shit Happens, Whats Done Is Done
Shouldnt Have Been Playing With Some Guns
Then Go Off Claiming It Was Only For Fun
Ya Shoulda Made Sure The Guns Were Unloaded
& To Pull The Trigger? They Weren't Goaded
Now What Do You Know About Their Condition
It's Critical, Death Was Close, But Not In Right Position
This Is Volume One, Tomorrow They'll Be A New Edition
"What Else Happens When Your Gun Has Ammuntion."
They Ain't Have Permission, What If They..
..Did This For Recognition?

The Kid Who Shot Him

We Were Just Playing, Its Not What It Looks Like
I Didn't Do It On Purpose, I Didn't Mean To Strike
We Thought They Were Unloaded, And Didn't Pay Attention
And After I Saw Him Gettin Hit, My Head Was Filled With Tension
And Not To Mention, It Was Nice Out, Sun Shining Bright
So My Heart Was Filled With Joy, Thought Everything Was Alright
But Night Came Faster Then Expected, & So Did The BBs
The Degrees Dropped, And The Wind Was A Cold Breeze
I Thought I Aimed At The Trees, And Pulled The Trigger
Then The BB Hit Him In The Head, And Bruise Got Bigger.
And Bigger.

this piece was good.i was feelin the way you set up your verse with different people givin their point of views and the metaphores you used where good and the descriptions were vivid..hot shit..keep droppin..one

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Thanks, Uppin............................

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The Return..

yeah...that was i nice peice....the way that you state the different views, and how the verses were setup....

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"If A man half nice, then that means he half whack."
- Jadakiss -

"Money aint no loke, if you broke, you get laughed at"
- Cassidy -

I liked the concept behind the verse a lot. I thought the way you set it up was pretty clever, too. The only thing I didn't like was the constant rhymin of odd numbered lines. It made it hard to flow............. All in all it was a pretty hot verse and I gotta give you madd props for it..............

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clever shit my man. i agree with enygmas response to your verse.

i wrote a verse with different points of view, almost with a pulp fiction twist to it about 6 months ago. i never posted it though. i lost some of my notes and never really got back to organizing what i had left. if i finally drop it though (might just save it for my album), i'll let you know.

do me a favor and leave a response for my crews "c.s. propaganda" collab here in open mic, okay? thanks.

again, you get love testament. do your thing playboy. one.


........s.v. dangerous

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