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04-23-04, 09:18 PM | #1 | |||||||
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Lost Gone and Dead
IP: 535C 6651
Sometimes i don't know how to feel-sad,happy,or lustful ways,
When you change personalities through out the days, When you pounce your body over mine and i began to shed tears I try to figure what your thinking or have been throughout the years When you touch my face so gentle and chills run through my spine Why does it go that way will you forever be mine When you grab me by the hips and kiss my neck in such lust I wonder if you love me or am i just what you touch You speak those names babe,boo,baby and my favorite mami And when i cry myself to death you always somehow stop me Your forever there you fulfill my fantasies with the best intension And never failed to say you love me should i mention We walk talk and plan futures for the young ones to grow But everystep of the way i feel as if i lose you in my soul Im the one you'd rather take to your mother and not just the bed Then why baby,was our love lost gone and dead |
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04-25-04, 11:55 AM | #2 | |||
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IP: 871E 26D8
pretty good
the rhyme sheme was alright good for a love poem |
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04-28-04, 06:36 PM | #3 | |||||
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nice
IP: 588F 39F6
i liked it alot. it was an emotional. i really understand what you want to get across. you make your point very clear. and i like yhe way you ended it with your title. you must be real pretty.
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05-04-04, 10:31 PM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: 3A34 F752
Thanks a lot.
Holla at ya girl |
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