woah, i thought this jay tree fuck who aparantly beat me was supposed to be a so called "vet" and be good. this verse is wacker than the one i some how lost to. you had weak weak weak punches. kids were calling my rhymes elementry in our battle....but nah no way, your shit is elementry. my shit was just writin to fit on a bar, and it made sense. your shit is too long, doesn't really have much substance, but it rhymes more than once in a line, so i guess the kids enjoy it somehow. the really sad thing here is that your verse is actually better than this other kids verse. his is pitiful. sounds like he ripped off other verses that he thought sounded cool and tried to piece together something. thesis telekenesis....um tell me what those words mean and you might gain a little credibility....since i have heard them spit by a real emcee in that order. you are trying way to hard to sound smart, when in fact it makes you look even dumber than you are. your verse was all over the place. no structure, but even i can look past that if you have good punches...which you didn't. make your own shit up, and go from there. you should have been able to beat jay tree or whatever his name is with ease, he gave this to you with a cherry on top but you fucked it up some how.

sadly i vote for jay

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dren a.k.a. dren rapes u

Bitch shut the fuck up i had like 10 mins to write that crap i dont care anyways juss didnt want it too seem like i was stalling

Ight heres the break up
Countree:
Flow:7/10
punches:6/10
creativity:6/10
originality:7/10

Jack:
Flow:6/10
punches:6/10
creativity:7/10
originality:6/10

Vote=countree... close battle tho

yo man very close battle

Jay you had some coo punches and and flow..you like 1 or 2 metas in there too..u lacked personals tho..but you still came hard and i can c u have a lot of potential..
my favorite line was the tan bed one.

Jack you had some coo punches and flow too.. i like the way you got on his crew with the stem to stem line...You had some metas and had like 1 personal i think..Both of u guys have a lot of potential and both came at it hard...

my vote= Jack

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erm...yeah..JackOFAllTRaDeS get out of evautated for a will and evalute coz dat shit was wack..ur punches were week..also ur lines were so long it extraced all the flow....overall..4/10...keep the same amout of silibus in 1 lines..
jay..much beter..punches hit hard..flow was there...overall you were beter in every aspect...
pz out
v/jay

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Joat: need to work on your structure....but everything else was good,....need to work on your personals and meta4s..veryone likes a good personal....so if you do that then you will become real good...also work on you punches...all in all 8/10

TREE: you was coo ez to read but to simple next time come alil harder ive seen beta from you..so just come harder..make it a lil mo komplex and betta vocab....you got everything else down tho...all in all7/10

thanks for battlin in elevated...

vote=JOAT

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It's like this, peep his profile, it claims that he the iiish,/
Well U in Jay'z lyrical doghouse, and that means you the bitch./

^O.k? Opener Not Much With It Though 6/10

Finally took the step up dogg, so 4 yo sake, I hope you elevated,/
You rose fast, U can fall just as quick, another nigga I faded./

^Alright Quick On The Punch, Nice 7/10

Nah man, no cheatin' just skill, No woman, you beatin' for just thrill,/
No one 'gon remember U, U can scream your name till your voice gets shrill./
The name U use might leave niggaz confused, Falsely implyin' you got skills,/
Heard a Jack of All Trades is a Master of none, That's why rap won't pay Ur bills.

^Nice Punches'... But The 4Ending Rhyming'Words Kind Of Threw Your Verse Off' ..! Shouldn't Of Done That' ..!! 9/20

!! Alright

Checckit Checck' Joat's:

NO FEEDING, you fed off all my shit and ate it as a meal, This CAPS twisted and sealed
You showed me nothing new "ELEVATED" but ur rap wasnt revealed

^Nice/Smoothe Opener' ...! Heated!!! 10/10 Hott Hott Hott

I'll depict ur lyrics stem by stem, making your peeps Da Branch you from the click
My RAP Ryhmes and it sticks the type of physical bond like when ur hand touches dicks

^Nice Punchline' .. But Some Played' Still Nice Though 8/10

My mind just coached my lyrics to perfection, placing you where you directioned,
in the rap battles losing section, have any other lasts requests None too Mention!!!!

^And A Nice Closer To Finish It Off' .....!! ******


Vote: JoaT

Good Battle On Both Sides Though' ..! (Nice Verses)

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