aight im in school and bell bout 2 ring so


ramsack homez//anon known//2 lacerate~ur~bonez//like spontanaous stormz// (countdown) until thiz niggah iz gone//
keep ur chin , like tsunami's im classified 2 ruthlessly blow//like septic tankz, battlin me u'll lose, im sick wit tha flow//

that sum stupid shit, i gotta bounce leave sum feed

?? what are you talking about? this is not good. not good at all. i have never seen anyone try to incorporate smilies into being part of a verse. reason is, it throws the whole thing off. i guess you have an excuse since the bell was about to ring. think your verse out better. "like tsunami's i'm classified to ruthlessly blow? tsunamis are giant waves due to underwater earthquakes. they don't blow. come harder.

yo Onetwo, you up for a battle quicky???

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aiight. go set it up.

hold up G, in the Middle of one

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yea, onetwo, i waz WAY off, like i said that waz sum stupid shit, i'll spit sumthin else hotter when i get time

take your time homie. we're not rushing you. just don't drop when you don't have time to think your flow out.

ima agree with everything onetwo said and add that there was no flow in your first couple lines, the smilies threw it off, if it was even there and u had some nice ideas that you could have worked with but as you said ya didnt have time. the verse had potential but ya lost it.