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Old 05-16-04, 04:18 PM   #1
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Daylight ft. Aesop Rock

IP: A1EF 3718

Chorus (Aesop Rock):
All I ever wanted was to pick apart the day,
put the pieces back together my way.
All I ever wanted was to pick apart the day,
put the pieces back together my way.
All I ever wanted was to pick apart the day,
put the pieces back together my way.
All I ever wanted was to pick apart the day,
put the pieces back together my way.

Verse (Entalect):
On occasion I'm calm 'n' waitin' for my god to cave in and brawl my satan.
Comtiplatin', draw his face and have the pleasure of erasin'.

Buy my alcoholics and profolactics, stockin' up for covert tactics,
Trudgin', state of mind is over rapid, over-active, cold and drastic, throw it back it's
Rippin' through my seams, you wouldn't know about trippin' over your fallen dreams.
You could get in heaven, you do have one of the keys, it's in one of your pockets,
How many do you have? About fifteen.

One chance to reach in, good luck. Anxious to bite in like a child teething, good luck.
Mechivious, Tedious, Speedy rushed dicisions with no reasons, good luck.
Not takin shit blown down my throat, neither am I gonna suck up.

Finely tuned my mind, thoughts are calm and crystal.
Sittin' in an all night writin' vigil, Recitin' all the writings is simple
Only part thats hard Is keepin my saliva up to par,
So I sip on my liquid from the bar while I carve to wet my whistle.

God gives a certain brain impulses to figure how to converge them,
Now why he gave it to this insane 'some kid' is somethin to this day I've wondered.
Wondered how I could I invade the race of hundreds
With melodic words unassisted but funded these punned quips.

Only way you could impare me is to bare me the care free life
Standing on floor one with no where to go cause of the broken stairy flights.
Life's much more than your endo and throwin' varied dice.
Living's a burden if not certain for learning and earnin'
Hit me with what you got, life,
All I ask if for you to prepare me, Strife.

Chorus(Aesop Rock):
All I ever wanted was to pick apart the day,
put the pieces back together my way.
All I ever wanted was to pick apart the day,
put the pieces back together my way.
All I ever wanted was to pick apart the day,
put the pieces back together my way.
All I ever wanted was to pick apart the day,
put the pieces back together my way.
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Constructive critisism please? I'd appreciate it if I get more than a "shit's hot man". Favourite lines, comments... whatever.
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Old 05-16-04, 04:20 PM   #2
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And here's the verse with rhyming serperations...
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Old 05-16-04, 04:21 PM   #3
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Chorus (Aesop Rock):
All I ever wanted was to pick apart the day,
put the pieces back together my way.
All I ever wanted was to pick apart the day,
put the pieces back together my way.
All I ever wanted was to pick apart the day,
put the pieces back together my way.
All I ever wanted was to pick apart the day,
put the pieces back together my way.

Verse (Entalect):
-On occasion- I'm -calm 'n' waitin'- for my -god to cave in- and -brawl my satan-
-Comtiplatin'-, -draw his face and- have the pleasure -of erasin'-

Buy my -alcoholics- and -profolactics-, stockin' up for covert-tactics,
Trudgin', state of mind is -over rapid-, -over active-, -cold and drastic-, -throw it back it's-
-Rippin' through my seams-, you wouldn't know about -trippin' over your fallen dreams-
You could get in heaven, you do have -one of the keys-, it's in one of your pockets,
How many do you have? -About fifteen.-

One chance to -reach in, good luck-. Anxious to bite in like a child -teething, good luck-
-Mechivious-, -Tedious-, -Speedy rushed- dicisions with no -reasons, good luck-.
Not takin shit blown down my throat, neither am I gonna -suck up-.

Finely tuned my mind, thoughts are -calm and crystal-
Sittin' in an -all night writin' vigil-, -Recitin' all the writings is simple-
Only -part- thats -hard- is keepin my saliva up to -par-
So I sip on my liquid from the -bar- while I -carve- to -wet my whistle-

God gives a -certain- -brain impulses- to figure how to -converge them-
Now why he gave it to this -insane 'some kid'- is -somthin- to -this day I've wondered-
Wondered how I could I -invade the race of hundreds-
With melodic words -unassisted-, -lives with- and -funded- by these -punned quips-.

Only way you could -impare me- is to -bare me- the -care free- -life-
Standing on floor one with no where to go cause of the -broken stairy flights-
Life's much -more than- your -endo- and -throwin' varied dice-
Living's a -burden- if not -certain- for -learning- and -earnin'-
Hit me with what you got, -life- all I ask is for you to -prepare me, Strife-

Chorus (Aesop Rock):
All I ever wanted was to pick apart the day,
put the pieces back together my way.
All I ever wanted was to pick apart the day,
put the pieces back together my way.
All I ever wanted was to pick apart the day,
put the pieces back together my way.
All I ever wanted was to pick apart the day,
put the pieces back together my way.
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Old 05-16-04, 05:06 PM   #4
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On the real, niggas sleep hard.
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Old 05-16-04, 07:12 PM   #5
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....flow was shitty. vocab and
word choice was great and the
line quality was good, i say keep
spitten , gettin yah structure
fixed, flow better story lines,
should be good.
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Old 05-16-04, 08:56 PM   #6
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Eh, thanks for the comments. The flow works well... I guess it just has to be heard. I gotta get my Microphone wit my next check.

Keep'em coming.
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Old 06-02-04, 01:00 PM   #7
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everything was weak and it was way 2 long keep elevatin big tim iight best of luck to ya kid...........
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