I have fire in my words so u better run//
look what I have done I shoot this bitch with my gun//
now u are on the ground bleed'in and u started cry'in//
u r on that edge of death so u might be die'in//

^^^^^way too simple...elevate with more complex punches and set ups using metas and wordplay


you be claiming you'z a lover boy but homie to who?//
no one would want to go to the sack wit chu if u was a kangaroo//

you love to rap but you ain't at anyone on this site's level//
you ain't dope you can only be if you play in King Devil//

^^^punches kinda weak...but at least you threw them

Vote:Immortal...betta everything

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EMINEM's ^^^ Slim Shady lp

Den Den Den Den Den Den, Go go gadget dick!
Whipped that shit out, and aint no doubt about it
It hit the ground and caused an earthquake and power outage
I shouted "Now bitch, lets see who gets the best!"
Stuffed that shit in crooked and fucked that fat slut to death (Ahh!! Ahhh!)

lover boy ya verse was pretty weak i seen nothing that interested me at all just alot of babling goin on...work on punches and personals man cuz none of yours were good...your structure was off...and bars were stretched and forced...your verse came out really weak and you need to elevate a lot

I.S your verse was decent it wasnt that hott but the opener and the russian roulette bars won this battle for you... i think you need to elevate and use harder punches yours were decent but not too hott...and your closer was weak cuz you was talkin about yourself and your crew that isnt a good closer but this battle is yours cuz lover is just weak

vote: I.S

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