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Old 06-05-04, 02:20 AM   #1
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he idolized the ginuwine//
singin high of clementine//
head held high, tearful eyes//
holdin the nine next to his mind//
u missed the signs, all in his rhymes//
played blues notes live, lost his prize//
lost his will, he barely tries//
not real wise, thinks it's better to die//
verbal cries, his life's a lie//
hid his feelins behind disguise//
spent his time gettin high//
filty guy, drinkin wine//
snortin lines, never dined//
on the outside this man looks perfectly fine//
but the cop rushed to find//
a lifeless body that lies//
on my bed, that ressembles mine//
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Old 06-05-04, 09:53 AM   #2
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nice shit very hot continue 2 do da damn thang ight shawtie
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Old 06-06-04, 04:40 PM   #3
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hot!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!111
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Old 06-06-04, 05:13 PM   #4
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This was not that good. It was too simplistic, hardly any imagery, and no kind of emotion. I think you could of did better.
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Old 06-07-04, 09:11 AM   #5
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i think it was pretty good there was a few areas to elevate but nothing is perfect so keeep it comin iight.........
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