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Old 06-21-04, 12:24 AM   #1
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rate my freestlye

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Ur a pussy so im gonna bruze u like kobe did to that girl in colarado its gonna feel like ur gettin hit by motorcycle at full throttle after i beat u my face will look like i won the lotto. when i get mad i rather use a pen than a pistol and i try to make ths as clear as crystle. Im more incredable than the hulk i throw these rymes like i was Marshel faulk. Im riddin in a baretta with two barettas in my hand bitch i can catch u u anit the gingar bread man
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Old 06-21-04, 12:29 AM   #2
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need to elevate ...

first off you're doing text so you have to have it in a format so that people can understand and try to catch the flow. So instead of writing your verses like:

Ur a pussy so im gonna bruze u like kobe did to that girl in colarado its gonna feel like ur gettin hit by motorcycle at full throttle

Make the bars seperate so it looks like this:

Ur a pussy so im gonna bruze u like kobe did to that girl in colarado
its gonna feel like ur gettin hit by motorcycle at full throttle


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You need to up your vocab,rather than using all basic words,it gets borring ...
and make your verse mean something,it just seems like a whole bunch of mess
Read the Tutorials
It'll help you out alot ....


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Old 06-21-04, 01:08 AM   #3
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First Off, U Need To Format Ur Stuff, Its Really Hard 2 Read Like That, 2nd, Ur Ryhmes R Pretty Good, Keep Workin On It Though, Get Some Post, Battle Some More Newbies And Maybe I'll Give U A Shot, Call Me Out In Bitch Slapped After U Get Some Respect, I'll Battle U Then, So Keep Workin
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Old 06-21-04, 01:27 PM   #4
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i didn't like it at all, i don't know what to tell you
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