ok, 10 lines
go

Yo, i'll hang you on a pole and play you off as a scare crow/
put a whole in your chest so it'll whistle when air blows/
you better run like the gingerbred man, your about ta get baked/
i'll slap the shit out this disgrace, go battle other 13 year olds,
just get up out of this place/ rhyme pays, but your not about to get paid/
you couldn't sell a record if it came with a sac of weed/
it's sad to see, your lyrics are simply blasphamy/
tragically i have to put you to rest/
lay you flat on your back and put my foot on your chest/
coz even if yo ass couldn't hear, you still wouldn't be "def" (deaf)/

yo dawg yu is wack i wanna have a lyrical fight not a wrestle /
but after im done yu gon be fellin salty like a pretzel my flows is sharp /
i be bladin cause my rymes strike twice in the streets they call me raiden/
cause if yu think yu betta than me yu mus be disturbed/
cause im from the streets yu havent even been to the curb /
its like im on my death bed cause my flows is so sickly/
yo dawg my lyrics yu cant touch cause they like a pine bush they prickly/
its like epmd its jus strictly buissness but i aint gonna break like they did/
yu mus be slippin dawg cause yu neva seen rymes like these before/
so i should jus put a sign at the entrance that reads ...caution wet floor...

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The ONe wit the serious flow

Votes?

yo this was wack neither of you did real good the structure was goo at least for both of you but the truth had some more weak punchs so my vote goes to him

yo their i voted this was wac you both need to elavate so repay the faver and go vote for my battles my names and unfortunate and whiteyonthemic

I swear to god i'm not even trying, i wrote anything, just read my battle with Eyednty under horus, but ok i'll vote on your shit

ya'll came wit some shit that some of it didn't even rhyme
just get up out of this place/ rhyme pays, but your not about to get paid/
you couldn't sell a record if it came with a sac of weed/
this and
lay you flat on your back and put my foot on your chest/
coz even if yo ass couldn't hear, you still wouldn't be "def" (deaf)/
only actual things i saw good and they was both from one cat so he wins, but see shit dont really even rhyme, put ya rhymes at the end of each line and make bars without(/) in 'em, both need to elevate, but on da right track wit them two lines there playa,
vote up on my battle
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=131384

and whitey kid hit my battle up too, and i'll hit ya's up if ya drop a link in it. one

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