New to this community, not sure if my raps are anywhere near the style or level your used to. Check out either way.

Skater Dayz, incomplete just looking for tips and opinions


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Im that guy ya always hearin about
skatin the streets spittin lyrics from the mouth
with a beanie on my head and my shoes on my feet
Got my skatie straight under right rollin on the street
A car might cut me off but I just flip em off
Because I roll my own way no matter what the cost
I learnt many things rollin on the foot paths
Shovit kickflip, pulled straight from my arse
As I fly past everybody on the grass
im movin real fast on a mission that'll last
Got a pain in my arse and Im lookin for a glass
of water..
cause im gettin kinda dehydrated
I cant take it, my heads dryin up and I hate it
Went back to the park so I could skate it
But the park was locked so I just got faded
Made it..
all the way back home
Walked inside to the compression zone
I breathed in caught a breath of smoke
Went to breath out and my lungs just choked
I couldnt take it had to get out of there
Ran outside for a breath of fresh air
I jumped down the stairs and started to stare
At some crazy young chicky with bright purple hair
Thats enough I said man Im outta here
Ran to the fridge and grabbed a fresh beer
Mates come with because its time to move
And remove and opposition we dont appove

So stay the fuck out my way
I dont care whats you say
Im on a mission and your wishin
you could live through skater days
Soakin up sunrays with the chickies gettin laid
But your not because your lame
While i've been gettin paid...

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