Fluidmoon

Ya must be Mentally Deranged for tryin to battle me,
With a name like that,I "Dare ya to Turn" back, its too easy,
->>second line fell off in a major way but it was decent

I need a magnifying glass cuz ya punches aren't detectable,
Ya got no flow bro just quit cuz ya shit aint intellectual,
->>i was kinda feelin it

Rhymes is lacking punches,so take my advice, brush up on skill,
Cuz i bring sick fluidity with words, damn, mami's too illl,
->>second line was fillerish but ok

Too young, only 16, ya have no real rappin experience,
So I'll have to merk ya, just so u ya able to handle more of this,
->>doesnt rhyme at all

DaReturn

Fluidmoon is bout to look like micheal jackson in thriller
cus i say fuck New york, its da return of the cerial killer
->>what?

this pedaphile still fucking kids, ill make him leave earth
you prefer dicks since you aint never had pussy since birth
->>probably so if its a girl do your homework dude

the more you act poetic the more pathetic your fuckin shit gets
yo im homophobic, so you dont get credit,i hate battlin faggets
->>choppy flow and doesnt rhyme

your existness in life doest matter nemore since no cares
im relentless to stab this bitch till red covers his hairs
->>first line doesnt make sense but its ok

this niggas battling out of his league and i didnt show no pity
im done fucking with this fake ass easy e, go back to the city
->>this was my favorite part of it

Im gonna go with fluidmoon here...verses were about the same but some of DaReturn's shit didnt make any sense. Keep elevating.

v/fluidmoon

\/I didnt sleep on your battle dont sleep on mine\/

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DaReturn Break down: Ya shit made no sence it was like a Freestyle no punches connected like u where fighting a Imagenary Freind or somthin so work ya skillz

FLuidMoon Breakdown: some shit seemd she knew what she was doin and some was like Fillers and she aint have to try i think she got Potentiol and Punchez so she gott dizzz


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Im not bad shit....n y ya missin me bastids
Leave nigga's in da past like history-classes

i got to go with that cat dareturn even though the first line is over played everyone says that.lol
flow was both
same with style
but punch were dareturn but i don't get the name dare turn????? dare 2 turn back cuz niggas is scaried lol is that it?

well the whole fact that da return (damn ass sniper that what it is dare turn don't make sence) point all his nice punch to who he thought was a guy i didn't like but he was still better. like the punches even though indirected.

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Fluidmoon

Ya must be Mentally Deranged for tryin to battle me,
With a name like that,I "Dare ya to Turn" back, its too easy,
nice opener 6/10

I need a magnifying glass cuz ya punches aren't detectable,
Ya got no flow bro just quit cuz ya shit aint intellectual,
its an ok punch 5/10

Rhymes is lacking punches,so take my advice, brush up on skill,
Cuz i bring sick fluidity with words, damn, mami's too illl,
decent but not that good 3/10

Too young, only 16, ya have no real rappin experience,
So I'll have to merk ya, just so u ya able to handle more of this,
not that good of a closer, 1st line aint that 2nd is 2/10

16/40 not bad decent 40 percent

dareturn

Fluidmoon is bout to look like micheal jackson in thriller
cus i say fuck New york, its da return of the cerial killer
pretty good opener 7/10

this pedaphile still fucking kids, ill make him leave earth
you prefer dicks since you aint never had pussy since birth
ok punch but since she aint a guy it goes down 4/10

the more you act poetic the more pathetic your fuckin shit gets
yo im homophobic, so you dont get credit,i hate battlin faggets
pretty good first line 2 line same as before shes a girl 4/10

your existness in life doest matter nemore since no cares
im relentless to stab this bitch till red covers his hairs
great lines 8/10

this niggas battling out of his league and i didnt show no pity
im done fucking with this fake ass easy e, go back to the city
shes not a girl but ok first line bad closer overall 1/10

23/50 46 ive seen u do better though

vote dareturn

fluid moon had this due to her personals/punches hit a lil hrder and she had better vocab.......p.s the micheal jackson lines are a lil played.....structure was the same.......

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