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07-20-04, 04:35 PM | #1 | |||||||
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MY story
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i hang on to this peice, cuz its a part of me
i shoot blindly cuz i feel im drowning in a sea of a pool of my own blood i can hardly breathe i try so hard but its like a useless seige but for me thats about all i can do i struggle till my face turns blue but i get no closer to you but in my heart i want soo bad to get my hands on you you can run but you cant hide your ass is now mine ill be their just in time to c you sit down and begin to dine but ill be waitin there but not with a 9 ill have you by the hair with my HK in the air the air is so thick and full of tension it makes me sick im not nervous but this trigger is so slick ur like a bar of soap i tried so long to find you now i got you tied down with a rope cuz its my mental note of what you did to me its pissin me off, i cant wait to see ur brains all over ur plate and ur wife and kids runnin and freakin out yet i come out gunnin with an ak now kids blown down, you say its personal now its been personal kid cuz you stole my crown you stole the key to this city and i was gunna get rich cuz i can rhyme better than 50 that little bitch just because you want to stand in this light when teh light is lime, leave me runnin from the light xept its a life of crime im a fuckin kill you i hang on to this peice, cuz its a part of me i shoot blindly cuz i feel im drowning in a sea of a pool of my own blood i can hardly breathe i try so hard but its like a useless seige but for me thats about all i can do i struggle till my face turns blue but i get no closer to you but in my heart i want soo bad to get my hands on you shots in the night wake me up im covered in a pool of blood and guts my girl is layin next me me ur clip is empty, my babys cryin only 10 month old and shes dyin and what the hell did i do to you and now ur gunna make me throw my life away and bust this 2, bust my 8, and bring out this guage i no you want you money ur not gunna c that buddy cuz ur pay will come as payback cuz you stabbed me in teh back we were brothers yesterday, makes me sick thanks dawg for frontin me this brick ill pay you back next month and thats how it started i no life is tough, but not that tough we slowly became enemies i dont c how this all came to me im sorry how shit goes down but i try not to drown in sorrow because tommorrow it will all be over and ull be just like hova retired i hang on to this peice, cuz its a part of me i shoot blindly cuz i feel im drowning in a sea of a pool of my own blood i can hardly breathe i try so hard but its like a useless seige but for me thats about all i can do i struggle till my face turns blue but i get no closer to you but in my heart i want soo bad to get my hands on you so learn this lesson kids drugs are bad they make you sad, pissed off, and mad they make you do anything for just a little sack people will give you shit but if you dont pay them back they come back after you and make sure you do thats y you gotta stick you gotta stick to what you can afford like glue, just snort it from a tube, and it makes a better you shit like in this story happens every day dont think not to you cuz someday it may so just remember kids, dont grow to attached you girlfriend, mother and kids are all expendable and ur house may have you roof thatched but ur rich when you have a guage, and its dependable my story |
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07-20-04, 08:46 PM | #2 | |||||||
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07-20-04, 09:39 PM | #3 | ||||||
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aiight piece...simple vocab......could have used some multis.....flow was alil off to me....but overall nice piece ..........6/10mics
Onez
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07-21-04, 04:29 PM | #4 | |||||||
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07-21-04, 04:35 PM | #5 | |||||||
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IP: EA56 91C1
not too bad i give it a 6/10
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07-23-04, 12:31 AM | #6 | |||||||
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anyone willing to go into detail, id really like to know what i need to improve on
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07-24-04, 04:27 PM | #7 | |||||||
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07-24-04, 05:00 PM | #8 | ||||||
fuck da hataz B.A.M 4 life
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IP: 57E8 F910
ur wordplay was kindergarden middle school shit up da vocab work on ur multies work on sum punches but over all u did pretty good 6/10 keep practicin holla back
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07-26-04, 12:05 PM | #9 | |||||||
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thanks, ill have to work on that
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08-06-04, 03:30 PM | #10 | |||||||
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ok well here other than wordplay hows the story line
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