this feeling is different from before
no longer do i feel as if i am nothing more
than an empty cup
for when the feeling isnt empty, i know sumthings up
someone has reveled me to myself
someone has shown me that i am hazardous to everyones health
people say they care
by how can they bare
to look at me and not turn away?
how can they not see that i am mentally astray?
i have run myself over with my past until i have ripped a gaping hole
the hole that let the person in me escape, let out my soul
and it blew away before i had a chance to grab it out of the gusts of wind
i guess this is someoenes way of getting back at me for the times ive sinned
so fly away my soul
find someone elses shell to control
find someone who is worthy of living
because this someone is able to keep giving
and ill die with my soul tattered and frayed
my last thought will be that i wish my soul had stayed

that was deep and i know it was close to home. theres no way it cant be. i knnow it hurts but just keep you head up and ill be here for you always.....this had so much feeling in it maybe it was just cuz i know about it... but this had a good flow and was good but still i didnt like the topic... only becuz it hurts......well... keep ur head high, and repair your self....~peace (ghetto talk) LF

ay Monkey..This was a tight piece. I was feelin it..Heavy concept, imagery had me interested thru-out..

>it blew away before i had a chance to grab it out of the gusts of wind
i guess this is someoenes way of getting back at me for the times ive sinned

that was excellent, gyrl..you've much talent to offer this forum..stay up and keep blessin us.
Peace.

thanks leah... i know u dont like this topic, but i have to write about it....its just how i get it out most of the time than the other way.... come on aim if u can! love to ya

dagurlremarkable: thanks for the reply...im glad u enjoyed it... thanks for the compliments...love to ya

feelin ya on this one especially the wordplay on how the content got out. peace.

joey

joey terrifying: thanks for the reply...im glad u enjoyed.. love to ya

deep... Keep your head up man dont let shit fade you. Peace and Love 43i

thanks deca... im glad u enjoyed love to ya... peeps, please dont sleep this one... the other one u can sleep on, but i want to kow wat peeps think bout this one

hey monkey i aint trying to sound like a begger, but if ya got some time peep my 2 current peices 'our destiny' and 'over the edge' in poetic sculpture and give me sum fee back 'fore i retire em. it would be appreciated. peace.

joey

tyte drop lil one...this was hott...

i think i'm in love wit you..

jus play'n...

jus inlove wit you poems\\
all i can say

k-d: im flattered, truly, but im already taken but im really glad u love my poems... but thank u for takin the time to read my poetry, i really apreciate it....love to ya

deep for sure....i mean damn...parts of it was kind of 'close to home'..really was once again full of such pure and strong emotions...and the way you executed it....especially the ending....was very, very good...mucho respecto monkey....(!!!)...

varentao: im glad u enjoyed this peice...to alot of peeps, this is close to home, cuz everyone feels like this once in a while... thanks for the reply... love to ya

a nice deep piece very meaningful and true. keep it cumin