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Wut's Wrong?
IP: A5F8 353C
So wut if IM INSANE an have half a BRAIN....It only takes one maniac to fly an airPLANE...Crash it an collapse a BUILDING/
No IM not a terrorist but I do bring terror/ If ya really wanna scary sight try lookin in the MIRROR/ Tellin me I should go to a new SITE...But after this you'll be found on a NEWS SITE, with their worst journalist sayin you cant write...An thats jus me puttin it to ya polite/ An I know I aint a nuclear physicist or a ROCKET-SCIENTIST/ But I do know how to hook yo momma up wit my COCK-AN-APPLIANCES/ Cuz after this IM-a use ya head on ya momma's door like a DOOR-KNOCKER...AN when she answers we goin to her BED where IM-a KNOCK-HER...Not your idea of "Meet The Parents" is it? ya dumb FAUCKER*...I can HELP I was raised in HELL an made ignorant like JOHN-ROCKER/ Think ya can get platinum status off this? Ya JOKIN-RIGHT...Cuz ya couldn't come close to gold at Chuck -e -Cheese on free TOKEN-NIGHT/ Could never make it big cuz ya girl aint STROKIN-RIGHT...So Why would ya waist ya time on here or on the OPEN-MIC?/ Maybe instead of writin high you should write DRUNK...Cuz ALCHOHAL will lower ya for the FALL when ya go KERPLUNK/ So next TIME don't rhyme wit nonsense an cheap TALK...But until then do like ya local 7-11 an take a BIG-GULP/ By tha way I don't got perminent Brain Freeze/ U do cuz u sucked down 1 to many losser SLURPEES/ ~1~ UPPIN * Ben Stiller from the flick "Meet The Parents" Wut's wrong with this battle verse? ~1~ Last edited by M-Body : 07-02-02 at 12:30 AM. |
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IP: 994B 38DC
creative but alomst to cheezy. although the line about john rocker wz cool. same goes for the line b4 that one. not hatin just not feelin. it might work in a battle though1
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IP: F7AB 833F
i agree, a little corny. but you do what you got to do. pretty good wordplay, a little long but still aight. you got room for improvement, no diss necessary.
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IP: A5F8 353C
Yea I've heard the whole corny thing alot. But in all seriousness, this was written in like 10 min. Is it really that bad for the amount of time it was done in? Thanx for the feedback so far...~1~
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IP: 994B 38DC
cool for that fast of a vs. we all ryt sumpin corny when we write fast. jus keep doin wut u do.
if u get a chance check my open mic. For them $$$hungry hoes |
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IP: 4577 CD9A
it was str8 good 4 the time limit
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