Seekin rhyme skills, cause ya'll weakin/
speakin bout Kast's death, but couldnt beat him/
defeatin yourself wit ya weak metaphores/
dead ya whore out on da dance floor/
once more the kings back out of the joint/
heatin my 9 so you can feel tha hollow point/
anoint tha wounds, appoint ya crew/
grab ya 3'dz cause we comin strait for you/
get a clue, you need to learn/
Ill Ville katz got more cash to earn/
more bluntz to burn, more heat to lift/
we thrifty, ya'll catz move and drift/
we movin swiftly shift back to common ground/
get in my car pack up and come to ya town/
jus try and stop me when im comin full force/
I know you cant detract my course/
the source wants an interview/
but I dont read it so I deter to/
prefer to make it on my own/
take claim at how i've grown and control my throne/
known throughout the undaground/
apathy and boo were there when I was crowned/
IVCT comin out in tha game/
too many mothafukaz tryin to dirty Kasts name/
im past fame, dont know me, you soon will/
assume skill has takin me over when I speak yall swoon and chill/
you loon from pills, drugs got ya fellin better/
whatever as long as when your wit me you dont become a sweater/
cause the streets are gettin hot, my feet heat wit gloccs/
the cops beatin minorities for tryin to protect their blocc/
its gotta stop too many people are sufferin/
its gettin harder so a lot of people are tougherin/
rougher than needed, leavin tha scene bleedin/
hiding it from their families till a driveby occurs while their feeding/
imbreeding sick sick people, raping their seeds/
occuring throughout while the child she pleads/
while he grasps her arms and impedes/
she cries but no one hears and her soul recedes/
but Daddy I love you, she screams, he doesnt stop or heed/
broken many creeds, the child now is pregnant but no one even sees/
she's wonderin where God is or if he even exists/
She prays everynight only to leave pist/
misleading thoughts controll her mind and she stops to slit her wrist/
<<sound of Body Hitting the floor>>

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Kastaway - Controller of The Dark Realm
History has a bad habit of repeating itself. Learn from the events that took place Within the Gathering of Shadows.....

uppin fo' feedback... where ervry1 at

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Kastaway - Controller of The Dark Realm
History has a bad habit of repeating itself. Learn from the events that took place Within the Gathering of Shadows.....

the topic was a lil off but it was a very good peace u used ur multis well & flowed pretty well jus keep it up man can u holla up on this

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=16099

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http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=16026

thnx man

thanks I checked out one of ya pieces ima bout to go check out tha otha ina min...



Uppin this for some more feedback........

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Kastaway - Controller of The Dark Realm
History has a bad habit of repeating itself. Learn from the events that took place Within the Gathering of Shadows.....

co'mon yall let me get some feedback on dis...

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Kastaway - Controller of The Dark Realm
History has a bad habit of repeating itself. Learn from the events that took place Within the Gathering of Shadows.....

I liked this one, cause I feel you on it, nice job, peace

thanx man.. keep givin me feedback yall.......

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Kastaway - Controller of The Dark Realm
History has a bad habit of repeating itself. Learn from the events that took place Within the Gathering of Shadows.....

I thought this joint was on point til the end of it/i was'nt really feelin the last couple lines but overall u came real wit that 1 aight
C.F.C

I thought that the beginning and the end were pretty good. The middle just kind of lost focus. It seemed like three different topics all shoved together. Not bad rhymes, but it would have been easier to read if it was one continuous topic or three separate verses.

Peace

Yea.. I was kinda just keystyling it and something I heard in a song trigered something this girl and I were talking about and thats why the end is like a total different subject... thnx for the feedback... Keep it coming,,, thnx...

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Kastaway - Controller of The Dark Realm
History has a bad habit of repeating itself. Learn from the events that took place Within the Gathering of Shadows.....

uppin

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Kastaway - Controller of The Dark Realm
History has a bad habit of repeating itself. Learn from the events that took place Within the Gathering of Shadows.....

no no no