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Old 07-07-02, 08:39 AM   #1
danja
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my love...

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i know you've been through alot
you're pain is felt through me
and if the world becomes too much
i'll be there believe
sometimes i treat you wrong
and i know others do to
but thats the way life is
it'll be alright in the long
if i ever saw you cry godknows what i'd say
when you hurt, i hurt worse
flow through my barrier of pain
you cant describe what i feel for you
no one can, not even me
im dreaming of you always
my love.. its so deep


another short piece but i think it's very meaningful, please reply with your comments and such thanks.
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Old 07-07-02, 10:29 AM   #2
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okay....no beef....but you got to reply to other peoples too...if you want to expect any replies...you seem to have posted two pieces...but not replied to anyone elses...no beef......
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Old 07-07-02, 02:49 PM   #3
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yes you do have to reply to others no matter how good
yours might be just to be fair to the ohers that your peepin

this was alright even with its shortness pretty nyce
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Old 07-07-02, 11:06 PM   #4
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hmm

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yea....you do gotta reply to othas pieces..you can ask all the others...thats the one thing that pisses me off tha most....but this was good..much luv..God bless..1..
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Old 07-08-02, 11:31 AM   #5
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I was liking this piece for it's constant focus on being what it was all about, I did think that you could have written this with more emotion, you could have made this piece come all together with a lil more imagery, throw in some metaphours here and there and watch the magic happen it does wonders trust me, a nice piece that I liked though keep posting ...

love...
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