nicely dealt wit and sum of the vocab was tight but the flow just seemed to fall away sometimes with you continuing the bar a little too long. but still a good piece aight check any o mine cuz peace

I like the ideas that you were using here, some powerful lines used with some decent wordplay, aint a bad effort... I do think your rhyme scheme needs piccing up though, sometimes your waiting for another line and it drops, you need some consistency, your multies build your rhythm, jus try spitting it out loud... The wordplay was aight, some well used similies, and it was quite hard hitting, vocab was overall well used, ya need some work here and there, but you got madd potential, jus keep spitting and elevating, I enjoyed reading this piece...

Peez...

some lines seemed to drag on for too long, however the concepts you covered were nicely played. the rhyme scheme was so-so, but over all this is one of the better spits i've seen lately...

thanx everyone appreciate the fee back. the thing is though i have spit this one out load and i can pull it off. either way thanx. peace.

joey

i think was a decent text-show-i think your message might have been betta emphasized if u had done it in audio-----*hint*hint-------i can see this piece bein a lot more hot havin been heard instead of read---mad love always--one

thanx ncyclop3dia, i know i do need 2 get into audio. move to the next level of hip hop, but thanx for the fee-back, much appreciation.

joey

NICE PEACE JOEY
YOUR GOOD INDEED AND AN AUDIO WOULD BE A WISE INTEREST FOR YOU. HIT ME UP SOMETIME

THANX LOGIC, BUT HOW DO I HIT YA UP IF YA LEFT ME NO EMAIL OR AIM. EITHER WAY TO HIT ME UP ON AIM MY SCREEN NAME IS DAVID6635. PEACE.

JOEY

Nice wordplay...Felt this drop...Also liked the style flip...I think it would have been a tight audio

thanx halo appreciatte the love

alright thanx logic.

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