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Old 07-08-02, 10:02 PM   #1
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24 Hours To Live

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BOOM BOOM BOOM...
thats that tune of the glock
drive by shootins workin around the clock
ma brother...the victim
now outlined in chalk
its shock. its horror.
cant walk, cant talk
the only thing to do is to grab ma own glock.
am huntin this gang,DOWN, as if I was a hawk

so these fools are gonny die..
its al about revenge
its a suicide mission...but av just got to avenge

two wrongs dont make a right?
cant you see my plight?
ayo a just gotta fight

twenty four hours till a put ma plan into action
should create enough upset to cause nuclear reaction

cuz it aint no doctor sealin ma fate
its fuckers wit nines lookin to decimate

a few hours left before i proceed
yes im nervous, i just hope i succeed

now am crusin uptown, with ma gun blazin
its time to start, this fuckin hell raisin

bam! bam! bam!
ma piece is flying
brothers dropin to there knees...
they muthafucken dying
but av been hit too..and now am sighing

its ma last breath.
another one eight seven, another victim of a violent death....







not really that related to the subject but just tried to do somthin different with the subject.
give me feedback plz
Lata
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Old 07-08-02, 11:11 PM   #2
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damn man i actually thinked it was...real bad

thats that tune of the glock
drive by shootins workin around the clock
ma brother...the victim
now outlined in chalk
that was aight the rest was played out and simple didnt really flow keep elevatin peace ez b
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Old 07-09-02, 12:57 AM   #3
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CAT HAT RAT MAT SAT PRRAAT get the picture u rhymin too much keep elevatin dunny
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Old 07-09-02, 01:42 AM   #4
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wow.. i wont feelin this at all.. sorry dawg
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Old 07-09-02, 02:53 AM   #5
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too simple, short bars...not feelin' it...1
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Old 07-09-02, 03:23 PM   #6
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It aint the end of the world, this is jus too simplistic, theres no complexity, no power in this... Thats what your really looking for... Everyone starts like this, jus keep spitting and elevating, look above for the tips... Try using some multies and complicate your bars to make a personal style and elevate through it... I seen worse then this sun so dont worry about it, jus put another script out, you will improve...

Peez...
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