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Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio ![]() |
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succ macokk |
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1 | 16.67% |
Empire |
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5 | 83.33% |
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The Original Half Ass King
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
Voted For: Empire
Opener - Succ, was stronger than Emps Closer - Emp, Succ, yours was weak dawg Punches - Emp, Succ you coulda used those punches on anyone, get more creative and focus on the specific person your battling Personals - Emp, he had more and explained them too Metas - Succ, thats prolly what he used for 85% of his verse Multies - Emp, he actually had some, succ didnt Structure - Emp, much neater Vocab - Neither had anything great succ: You need to elevate on Punches and personals, but not only that, I feel you gotta fix up your structure cause it kinda throws off the flow of your verse. Find a format that you can really feel, and clean it up by keeping sentences together without the ....... everywhere. Emp: You merked this guy with half as many lines as he did. Well done man. I usually give eveyone an area to elevate in but you seem to be commin along fine. Keep doin what your doin man. No hate. -Vote Empire... |
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