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Old 09-19-04, 01:14 PM   #1
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I Wish I Could Fly

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I wish i could fly high in the sky
Wings spread out far soaring high
I wish i could fly high above the clouds
Away from my trouble and sins me not coming down
I wish i could fly get away from here
Away from my enemies the people that's here
I wish i could fly just fly all day
Saying by to my friends sayin hey to the day
I wish i could fly through sleet, rain, and cold
Fly when im young fly when im old
I just want to fly away from the bad
I want to be happy not being sad
I wish i could fly high in the sky
Wings spread out far soaring high


Just something i thought up
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Old 09-19-04, 03:31 PM   #2
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nice easy goin drop right here. It was kinda wierd cuz I seen ur icon and sig and it looks all like "who want beef" and everything and then u got this easyfeelin poem. but over all nice break from all the beef and conflict flyin around but, over all descent drop I was feelin, and yea, I wished I could fly once
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Old 09-19-04, 03:33 PM   #3
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thx fo da feedback
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Old 09-19-04, 03:50 PM   #4
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chia no doubt, keep up them drops nigga
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Old 09-24-04, 05:08 PM   #5
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upping for more feedback on my poem
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Old 09-24-04, 06:36 PM   #6
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i feel you, i think like that sometimes, umm, nice little poem, seemed too structured though, too cut and dry, i liked it though, no hate here, just giving the truth to my opinion, i feel you coulda said more, or used more vocab, but pretty decent overall
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Old 09-25-04, 10:49 AM   #7
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